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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2004-04-18 07:16 AM

Take a Ride

Take a soar across your time
Skate on metaphors magic rhyme
Life is laid in tracts of thought
Yours is made of what you wrought

It makes no difference what you are
Your egos reference bends the spar
The wind and air will paint your heart
The sail and dare will taint the art

Your visual is summoned past
Of some you’ve thought and some you cast
And some you’ve left behind to do
That never reached the state of new

In the meanings of the words
Flies the homing of the birds
Brings the moth onto the flame
Shows the aim and art of frame

It is your goal upon the sea
It is your soul that you would key.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-04-18 08:37 AM

And you've keyed this very well, Sy...
A good, good Sunday morning to you sir...

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

2 posted 2004-04-18 09:15 AM

"Take a soar across your time
Skate on metaphors magic rhyme
Life is laid in tracts of thought
Yours is made of what you wrought"

Your words ring true this morn Sy.
Loved this Sunday morn verse.
~Morning hugs & tea, Nancy~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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Eternity

3 posted 2004-04-18 09:40 AM

Beautiful and insightful. Enjoyed this ride ...
Your Sunday gift is precious.
Love and hugs. Margherita

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2004-04-18 09:56 AM

Your visual is summoned past
Of some you’ve thought and some you cast
And some you’ve left behind to do
That never reached the state of new

I love this, Seymour. Beautiful writing,
as always, my friend.

Hugs

Ethel

MGROVES

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california

5 posted 2004-04-18 12:12 PM

like the others, this is truly beautiful

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

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In your dreams

6 posted 2004-04-18 12:16 PM

I liked this alot.
-Juju-

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

7 posted 2004-04-18 01:18 PM

Sy, I was reading your old stuff back in Open 1

I love each style you have in you

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2004-04-18 02:13 PM

The wind and air will paint your heart
The sail and dare will taint the art

~~~~~~

Your visual is summoned past
Of some you’ve thought and some you cast
===================================

and those will be my way cool couplets of the day!!! Me thinks you've had extra wisdom rice for breakfast today.

Love the message of this one Sybabers
and as for this part....

Brings the moth onto the flame
Shows the aim and art of frame

your name is on the flame...and Im hoping this moth has good winkie aim. LOL

... and it's you ... you ... you ... you ...
the light changes when you're in the room.

M.B.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2004-04-18 05:25 PM

Sunshine
Love you too.

Nancy,
Thank you sweety, Hugs.

Margherita
Sweet reply, thank you.

Ethel
Thank you my friend, hugs back.

MGROVES
Thank you, thank you.

Juju
Allot is good enough for me.

passing,
You are a love.

JM,
I think this moth has a very good eye, just look at her pictures.
WWRS

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

10 posted 2004-04-19 10:47 AM

Greetings to you, this fine Spring morning!

"Skate on metaphors magic rhyme" ~ You are the Scott Hamilton of poetry as your words glide across this ice of blue!

Springy squeezies,
EA

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

11 posted 2004-04-19 10:50 AM

Take a soar across your time
Skate on metaphors magic rhyme
Life is laid in tracts of thought
Yours is made of what you wrought

Very true, Seymour. Hope you have
a good day today.

Hugs,
Ethel

Grover
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since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

12 posted 2004-04-19 10:51 AM

A great write!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

13 posted 2004-04-19 07:05 PM

Earth Angel
And you are such a flatterer.

Ethel
Always have a good day when I see you here.

Thank you Grover.

forne_marin
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since 2004-04-13

Posts 140
Spartanburg, South Carolina

14 posted 2004-04-24 12:40 PM

That is really beautiful. The rhythm is terrific and the rhyme is very pleasing to the ear. This one would be great to hear read out loud.

Good Job!

I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

15 posted 2004-04-24 02:10 PM

forne_marin
Thank you for the read and like.

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