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BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2004-04-17 09:53 PM

~*~

I've watched so many ships pass
dreaming of the sunrise in your eyes
tinged in slated blue.

Scorched by unwelcome tears
that followed in the mourning wake
and the kind of love I'd hoped to find.

With every sail I've raised
torn apart and mended
my hopes lie shattered, but never broken.

When sorrow pours like rain
I've searched the brightest beacon
for the light encompassing my faith.

Pleading with the silence of the stars
pausing beneath a moonlit sky
drawing a bridge that never fails.

To move me with a jolt
and a never ending passion
in pursuit.

~*~

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

1 posted 2004-04-17 10:01 PM

and may you stay the course....of the pursuit
of dreams
lovely as always yellowbird

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2004-04-17 10:23 PM

"drawing a bridge that never fails..."

Excellent Bluesy.
TD

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2004-04-17 11:08 PM

If I were the wind
I’d fill your sails so full of love,
your soul would fill the sky.
But I am only me
trying to play you a symphony, so true,
your heart is the beat everyone hears,
the tune so passionately felt,
the words so lovingly sung.
If I were the wind,
I’d fill the heavens with you . . .
but I am only me,
wishing I were the wind for you.

Smile, my friend...and brighten our world.

jwesley

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2004-04-17 11:27 PM

Thank you so much for reading, Michele, Kathleen and jwesley... I'm just doing a bit of reflecting on what I once thought was too good to be true.

Right time, wrong ship!!!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

5 posted 2004-04-17 11:58 PM

a wonderful write Lori...good to see you!!

hugs
M

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2004-04-18 12:17 PM

Good to read you again Bluesy.
Some things are just too good to be true.
Hugs~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

7 posted 2004-04-18 12:29 PM

enjoyed thanks for sharing

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2004-04-18 01:41 AM

Thanks for your nice replies, Maureen, Nancy and Marsha.

I so appreciate them, and you~

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

9 posted 2004-04-18 02:33 AM

very nice...you has such a sweet lull

dreamily pulling me in at times

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

10 posted 2004-04-18 03:55 AM

this is melancholic and beautiful...just the way I like them!

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

11 posted 2004-04-18 06:56 AM

Bluesey
Well done...

Emotions do move in "jolt(s)"
especially passion, which in reality has no smooth syncopation and cannot be recorded by the tick of a clock...
enjoyed
-------ice
><>

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

12 posted 2004-04-18 09:49 AM

Very, very beautiful writing, Lori.
I knew it would be when I opened t up.

Hugs, my friend

Ethel

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

13 posted 2004-04-18 09:13 PM

Thank you Dawn, Dixie, ford, and Ethel~

the jolts are taking their toll I'm afraid.

so many hugs to all of you~

Opeth
Senior Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

14 posted 2004-04-19 09:22 PM

I believe that only a person who lives by the ocean can pen words such as these... and the longing that never dies, lives on.

For some reason, I feel like singing, "Brandy, you're a fine girl, what a good wife, you would be... but my life, my love and my lady, is the sea!"

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

15 posted 2004-04-19 09:35 PM

Gee Opeth, thanks for leaving such a nice reply...
and for singing a song for me.

Made me smile, you did!

Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

16 posted 2004-04-19 10:50 PM

I've watched so many ships pass
dreaming of the sunrise in your eyes
tinged in slated blue.

An absolutely gorgeous way to begin your poem.  I like the optimism in this(i.e.
mending of the sail, search for brightest beacon...)  even if the sailing hasn't been smooth.
             Excellent read.
               Sadie

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

17 posted 2004-04-19 11:35 PM

Sadie~ Thank you for your knowing reply.
I don't think there is such a thing
as smooth sailing, once we venture out to sea...

Makes me want to go back to my little grass shack.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

18 posted 2004-04-20 12:30 PM

Lori

The ocean, like passion, is turbulant by nature....and it feels right that it be that way. Loved your poem!

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

19 posted 2004-04-20 01:38 AM

....survival's not in the sails, it's in the keel....nice and heavy so you go topside up even if you're capsized....the kind Lori has!

You have a gift, and it does me good to see you display it here.

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______________Ratleader______________

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

20 posted 2004-04-20 02:21 AM

Beautiful, Blues.

You look like a model in your picture.

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

21 posted 2004-04-20 07:59 AM

with the eyes of a little girl
she looks at the sky
touching the stars with her thoughts
leaving them with finger print love

enjoyed your soul ms blue

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

22 posted 2004-04-20 08:35 AM

I love when you reflect....hugssss dear dont sail too far ok....

~~**~~
The sound of silence calls,
I hear your voice and suddenly
I'm falling, lost in a dream
The echo of our souls meet
~~**~~

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

23 posted 2004-04-20 08:37 AM

Your slate of blue is a beautiful hue of your heart hon. Love this. Good to see ya!

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

24 posted 2004-04-20 11:31 AM

"With every sail I've raised
torn apart and mended
my hopes lie shattered, but never broken."

~ Your ship is unsinkable, Dear Molly Brown!

Linda

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

25 posted 2004-04-20 11:56 AM

very lovely...I felt it could have been written from the top of a New England Widow's Walk...superbly woven...yes, stay the course, continue to seek the beacon, light will be your reward

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

26 posted 2004-04-20 12:00 PM

Oh, Yeah! This is a beauty. Nice read.
JL

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