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Forever Green and a Little Risky (response to muted's challenge)

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Sadelite
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0 posted 04-16-2004 06:07 PM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sadelite


Leaves stayed on trees
Always verdant.
Never did they fall or stray
Or in wind  become child’s racing play.

Fell they not on ground
Orange red or dressed in golden brown;
No leaves raked in circle round
For young hearts to jump and bound.

Never had they had the crave
To leave the mother tree
Never had they faith to see
Where they could go, what they could be,
the warming coal upon the night,
a glow from within the Earth, a diamond bright

They didn’t know if flung together
They’d grace the earthen floor.
In their brown, they’d crunch and hatch
To be not one,
but a hundred pieces more.

Not a  wind  could tease them to take a path
to detach selves from oaken branch;  
Leaves could not kiss the soil
or bathe in their sunlit oil.

No rainbows in puddles,
No shelter for Easter egg
No swishing sound in the woods
No  leaves to beg notice
  of their colorful range.

No Autumn to fall upon starving artist.


  But as always, there’s at least one rebel in the crew
That is a little pesty and a little risky
  A little drunken on life and maybe a little whiskey
Who explores beyond the tree
Splattering soft energy and  Fall color
upon a tapestry.




[This message has been edited by Sadelite (04-17-2004 12:45 PM).]

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1 posted 04-16-2004 06:37 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

That little one sounds a lot like me.?
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2 posted 04-16-2004 08:05 PM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

iliana,
    (Read muted's challenge on the discussion page)  Take care.
                 uhgs,
                 Sade
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ughs to you, too, sis!  lol!  

I re-read the poem after reading Muted's challenge.  The last verse said it all.  Still makes sense to me versus the rest of the family, though, in many ways, being that I was the one that tumbled off.  
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4 posted 04-16-2004 09:06 PM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

Yes you did and are blowing creatively in the wind.  Thanks for checking out into this.
                 Sade
                          
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Sade

A lovely personification...and wonderful poem.

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6 posted 04-16-2004 10:02 PM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

Thank you very much Martie.  It was inspired by Muted.  Her words touched me.
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7 posted 04-16-2004 11:38 PM       View Profile for muted   Email muted   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for muted

WOW SADIE!!
wow tears in my eyes, this is gorgeous!!!

speechless here
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8 posted 04-16-2004 11:46 PM       View Profile for Susan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan

I really enjoyed this -- quite lovely.  I especially liked the ending.

Susan
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Susan,
  I'm glad you enjoyed it.  I liked the ending best, too.  I like to try to find the positive in things "most" of the time.  There is too little time to be down in the dumps.  Thank you for reading and kind response.
                  Sade
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muted,
   This is yours to make changes as you'd like. I wrote it for you but may give it to someone from my church, also. You have such grace with words to change it if a thought is incomplete or inappropriate, I'm sure you'll make it right.  Good luck.  If you do, I'd love to see the new version.  I'm sure it would be a beaut!
                    Sade

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11 posted 04-18-2004 01:49 AM       View Profile for muted   Email muted   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for muted

I would never change a single word..never..
i would steal away its essence one letter at a time in doing so...and i dont want to lose a drop of you...you created this beauty..you will live on in every single word of it...

there is nothing i can do that will improve upon perfection.

Thank you for everything
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What profound beauty in this piece.
Truly captivating and touching.
Your heart listened well!
Love and hugs. Margherita
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muted,
   thank you for your kindness.  Good luck to you.  I hope this will be of some help.

                    Sade


Margherita,
   You are more than generous in your comments.  I appreciate your words and thoughts.
           Thank you,
             Sade

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This one is not to be missed, though I somehow missed it the first time around.
Profoundly beautiful, it offered me a perspective today that wasn't on my palette yesterday. Thank you so much.
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Kacy,

   You're so very welcome.  I don't know what perspective that might be, but I hope it is helpful.  I truly appreciate you and all you give to color my palette and those of others.   You have shown us true grace through tough times.  Hang in there!  We love you.

a great big hug to you,

Cathy
 
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