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LeeJ
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0 posted 2004-04-16 12:43 PM


Emblem by ownership
Untainted by consciousness.
Dramatizes a mind detaining
Climactic epiphany constitutes
Decisive 3 D-stage...imaginative process
Structures contemplation & feeling
Dresses a dual perspective engaging

Inter-city commuting with day's fading light
Draws us into a fairylike realm of twilight
Understanding our welcomed companion
Recognition spiritual...robustly communing.
Prudence inherits compassionate solace
I am lost in this city

Mutual affection prepares us for elated renovations
Self-affirmation…greetings, intellectual
Blessings budding in a white tinted golden rose
Progression, intense occurrence, visions creative
Carry me down a paved lifelike transformation

'I wandered,' within the breeze of artistic spirit
While it caresses and visits human tenderness, the core waiting patient
Interlacing, theatrical and prosaic.
Pivoting motifs on the 'weekend away'

Having this is in itself some strange permission
Transforming ability to exhilarating joy
The emblem is the blossom, and the bosom of earth
Resonates with more than a romantic sense
Passions spread thick...

An intimate sentinel, through paths unseen
Themes rapport, redefining elements of ancient history
Embodying a transitional stage in development
Metaphysical arrangements...

Potentiality, the artistic rite of passage
Metaphoric parallel…Swings open, tier by tier
Blossoms blown like souls flying on air
To an endless chasm beyond the senses
life's eternal sphere....we are


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JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
1 posted 2004-04-16 12:59 PM


What beautiful poetry you do write.  The last stanza in its self is a work of pure art.  The entire read is beyond words.  Very, very nice Lee J.

Please remember me when you become a famous millionaire writer.  I’ll wash your car and do your yard work for you!  HeeHee!

JL


Grover
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since 2004-01-27
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London, ON, Canada
2 posted 2004-04-16 01:11 PM


Yes, I agree. You are truly a gifted writer, Lee J.!
ThisDiamond
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3 posted 2004-04-16 01:42 PM


"Potentiality, the artistic rite of passage
Metaphoric parallel…Swings open, tier by tier
Blossoms blown like souls flying on air
To an endless chasm beyond the senses
life's eternal sphere....we are"


Although difficult to pinpoint the one striking chord, I loved these lines and could not leave without them.

TD

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4 posted 2004-04-16 02:39 PM


'I wandered,' within the breeze of artistic spirit
While it caresses and visits human tenderness, the core waiting patient
Interlacing, theatrical and prosaic.
Pivoting motifs on the 'weekend away'

Wonderful write Lee. Enjoyed. Chris

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5 posted 2004-04-16 03:02 PM


excellent, yes you are truly talented


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