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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2004-04-15 01:59 PM



Go ahead, tear apart my words…

Spell me in your ancient
binding

Latch me to your
key

Holler fore
as to warn me

Walk by my side
if you would step with me

Allow me to stand in your stead,
I promise I shall stick fast

Whisper your soul
that we might mate for life…

Should I fall to sleep, to dream,
please, then, wear me well…



© Copyright 2004 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2004-04-15 02:40 PM


Ingenious Dear Lady.
TD

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Canada eh.
2 posted 2004-04-15 03:41 PM


"Whisper your soul
that we might mate for life…

Should I fall to sleep, to dream,
please, then, wear me well…"

Wow....just WOW!!
Hugs~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
   is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

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3 posted 2004-04-15 03:43 PM


Constantly exploring, exploring, exploring... if there's form to be found, you better count on Sunshine to shed some light onto them...

It takes grace to treat an experiment with such humility, and the form is grateful to you... you've come up with something clever, compelling, that's not beyond its subject matter.  It's nice reading you again, mum.

Brian

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4 posted 2004-04-15 05:18 PM


please, then, wear me well…

Yes, please do...love that ending line Karilea

Mxx


Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

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5 posted 2004-04-15 05:49 PM


Clever concept.
Grover
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6 posted 2004-04-15 06:49 PM


A very good one, enjoyed much!
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7 posted 2004-04-15 06:54 PM


You write far too beautifully for your words
to ever be torn apart....other than through
your crafty way of composing them!!

JL
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8 posted 2004-04-15 08:04 PM


Very interesting write.  Very nice!
JL

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9 posted 2004-04-16 03:44 AM


this sent me off in my drifting mode....
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10 posted 2004-04-16 05:36 AM


Great write K...there is a message here....
Thank you..

Goldenrose.

''There is no need for temples, no need for complicated Philosophies.
My brain and my heart are my temples; my philosophy is kindness''-  Dalai Lama

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11 posted 2004-04-16 06:16 AM


oh this was fun to read, unique...nice
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12 posted 2004-04-16 06:53 AM


awesome Sunshine...simply awesome...I'd pick you to play on my team any day, any way!  An extremely powerful credit to you character, speaking volumns of who you are and what you stand for...Bravo!!!!!!
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13 posted 2004-04-16 07:16 AM


Good morning Sunshine

Another hand painted silk scarf write.

loved this.

~Tier

scorpio
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right...there
14 posted 2004-04-16 08:52 AM


Stongly expressed emotions.

believe in what your heart feels...

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15 posted 2004-04-16 08:47 PM


smiling wide...

I was wondering what all those italics were about!

*giggle*

clever, sweet sunshine!

especially the title, after considering...

heh.


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16 posted 2004-04-16 08:55 PM


Clever thinking, Sunshine!  Enjoyed.
iliana
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17 posted 2004-04-16 10:35 PM


Karilea, I really enjoyed this -- looked like fun to write! ......jo
jwesley
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18 posted 2004-04-16 11:19 PM


Very well done...and very cute, too!

Enjoyed much.

jwesley

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