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mysticpoe
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0 posted 2004-04-15 01:35 PM



She held yellow crystals
in one hand as she smiled.
With the other
a summon,
lonely breeze from the isle.

Those days by the Sea,
the softness once knew.
Magical it seems,
so close
and so true.

Now timeless
since passing,
our moments are still.
I know from one crystal,
that love never will.


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LeeJ
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1 posted 2004-04-15 01:36 PM


whewww, this was so pretty, so soft and yet the last line sent it to print...outstanding write.
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2 posted 2004-04-15 01:38 PM


Yes...magical !
Enjoyed.
hugs, Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

passing shadows
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3 posted 2004-04-16 03:58 AM


what an ending! wow!
Goldenrose
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4 posted 2004-04-16 05:33 AM


Great ending...very good poem..

thank you....

Goldneose.

''There is no need for temples, no need for complicated Philosophies.
My brain and my heart are my temples; my philosophy is kindness''-  Dalai Lama

eor
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5 posted 2004-04-17 07:25 PM


well poe, you did it again, i dont see you much any more but each appearence is fantastic!

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

forne_marin
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6 posted 2004-04-18 02:56 PM


The poem runs around itself. It is ripe with symbolism and it's meaning is not immediately apparent.

But that's okay. That's poetry. It has a great beat and a great rhyme scheme and I loved the imagry. Good job.

But the most wonderful thing about Tiggers is I'm the only one!

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