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Rewrite (muted's Poetry Challenge) |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 this is so sad but so beautiful Dawn |
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Obscurity Member
since 2003-12-04
Posts 153In A Melancholic Dream |
Oh god this is really depressing, but absolutely beautiful! I'm still in awe, and unfortunatly have no words to say other then 'bravo' |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ooooooooooooooh....what can I say to this one -- your poetry speaks volumes. Despite the deep sadness through this read, your talent shines through.  |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
I loved it buddy  Beautiful piece of writing. Thank you for showing it. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Sad but very well wriiten and told...thank you.. Goldenrose. ''There is no need for temples, no need for complicated Philosophies. My brain and my heart are my temples; my philosophy is kindness''- Dalai Lama |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sad but stunning. Well done! Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
beautifully written, yet so sad... heartwrenching write...felt and seen through the mind's eye |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
The emotions are vivid, yet they resound in glorious strength. What rapt vibrance! TD |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
You just reach right in there and grab at the heart and don't let go... Touching, sad, yet magnificent write. Hugs~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, to be given the chance to rewrite the endings of some of the chapters in our lives... ~ A pretty, pensive, poetic piece of poetry!  EA |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A very beautiful, heartfelt, compassionate and touching write. And the picture matched so perfectly. We are all on the Path! Love, Margherita  |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Everybody, thank you for your kind words |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
I love the line "and sing of places where the secrets hide" You are really talented girl! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
If we are the ink, then should we use it sparingly to make it last longer, or just let it flow full force, in total saturation? A very poignant and pondering write, Dawn. Hugs to you both, knowing you will enjoy life drop-by-drop, never looking at the well as being empty. |
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