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Susan Caldwell
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I saw you in the restaurant.
It must have been a treat
to be able to go out.
You were so excited.
Jabbering endlessly
to your father and brother.

You didn’t let their lack
of interest bother you.
Guess it was the norm.
I watched you with keen interest.
Your enthusiasm like a spring bloom,
so happy to greet the world.

You stood by your father
as he paid.
Your words suddenly slurred,
with a roll of eyes,
I saw you fall.
I watched you seize.

Disbelief shadowed my face,
for the first thing you saw,
when function was restored
was your father,
screaming at you for getting too excited,
and causing an embarrassment.

As your father’s words
excited you once again,
from somewhere I heard your brother shriek,
“Get him out of here!”

I turned away,
shedding a tear for their lack,
the scars you would wear,
and the enthusiasm that would soon disappear.  



"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~
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Brad Majors
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1 posted 04-14-2004 03:14 PM       View Profile for Brad Majors   Email Brad Majors   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad Majors

awesome one susan
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painful painful read...
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Few things anger me more that ill-treatment or inconsideration of a child. This one makes me angy...as well as sad.
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Dittoing Dear...
but you portrayed reality
very well...
perhaps that's why it hurts so much...

see you in #32, Susan...
Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 04-14-2004 11:10 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

You know...this wasn't my story, I just made it mine.  It happened in a restaurant in Indiana and it was my sister that witnessed it.  When she told me, I was, well pissed.  So I wrote it out.  

Thank you for the kind replies.

(32 it is Karilea!)

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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6 posted 04-15-2004 12:49 AM       View Profile for muted   Email muted   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for muted

oh this hurts!! oh how angry i would have been if i were to watch this scene in person!
iliana
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Susan, this nearly has me crying as it brought back many memories of all the precious moments I saw ripped apart by similiar type behavior by my ex-husband -- and the scars that left, we still deal with 21 years later.  There are all kinds and forms of abuse -- I understand this kind.   to you.......jo
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happens all too often, on behalf of the unenthused, thanks
Susan Caldwell
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9 posted 04-30-2004 10:19 AM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

No, thank you, Raph.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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10 posted 05-12-2004 12:42 PM       View Profile for Brad Majors   Email Brad Majors   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad Majors

beautiful piece susan!
 
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