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Greeneyes
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0 posted 04-13-2004 07:57 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Greeneyes



Lost thoughts of you invaded my heart
while I tried to rest  
from  chambers of soul
that hold him--memories of mind
against the backdrop of water

thatís hard to think about

This morning sunlight swept
through my window
warming everything but my heart
it offered no replacement
no understanding--no surrender
no mending

his voice or maybe anotherís
tangles the distance
of some night where the eyes
are never satisfied
but maybe I love him? I try to
find the breeze to feel his touch

it was dark again when I remembered --

talking to myself&

here I am  
letting midnight take over - seeping
endless hours wrapped in wasted music
another nights storm
without comfort or change of season

I trace the blue trickle of tears
with lonely fingers
weaving the black from eye to mouth
perhaps we all get to that edge
where the moon remembers sorrow

you are not here
to whisper me to sleep

storms plays echo across the sky
I find the wind and weep


~~**~~
The sound of silence calls,
I hear your voice and suddenly
I'm falling, lost in a dream
The echo of our souls meet
~~**~~
© Copyright 2004 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
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with you


1 posted 04-13-2004 08:01 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Lauren....wow....I tired to find a favorite part here, but damn girl, all of this touches me excellent excellent write
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2 posted 04-13-2004 08:04 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Layers of silk...James
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Somewhere in time~


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"storms plays echo across the sky
I find the wind and weep "

Layers upon layers peeled away...
gawd this is SO good.

Love ya pretty lady~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
   is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

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GreenEyes~
Just about as pretty as pretty can be~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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5 posted 04-13-2004 09:12 PM       View Profile for Susan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan

Beautiful in its sorrow.  

Susan
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6 posted 04-13-2004 09:47 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

perhaps we all get to that edge
where the moon remembers sorrow

~~~~~~~


that line takes my words away....

(ykikykik)

Home is a feeling I buried in you ...
I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ...

M.E.

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just out of reach


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I trace the blue trickle of tears
with lonely fingers
weaving the black from eye to mouth
perhaps we all get to that edge
where the moon remembers sorrow

Beautiful write Lauren. hugs, Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

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8 posted 04-14-2004 02:15 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

gawd how I love your sad ones!
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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving


9 posted 04-14-2004 10:29 AM       View Profile for muted   Email muted   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for muted

"I trace the blue trickle of tears
with lonely fingers
weaving the black from eye to mouth
perhaps we all get to that edge
where the moon remembers sorrow

you are not here
to whisper me to sleep

storms plays echo across the sky
I find the wind and weep "
````````````````````````````
you write of sadness so beautifully,
almost makes melancholy seem inviting...
so touching and gentle
choshi
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10 posted 04-14-2004 11:14 AM       View Profile for choshi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for choshi

WOW!  You move in so many directions simultaneously, yet seem so focused...beautiful write...~P
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11 posted 04-24-2004 11:24 PM       View Profile for Rdz9   Email Rdz9   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rdz9

Sad... yet beautiful... emotional, maybe...?
Enjoyed.
-Rdz

One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world...

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Nice!
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"you are not here
to whisper me to sleep

storms plays echo across the sky
I find the wind and weep"

Oh, Lauren, there were so many good lines in this one, but these are my favorite.   ...jo
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The Ravines


14 posted 04-28-2004 07:42 AM       View Profile for Opeth   Email Opeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Opeth

"here I am  
letting midnight take over - seeping
endless hours wrapped in wasted music
another nights storm
without comfort or change of season

I trace the blue trickle of tears
with lonely fingers
weaving the black from eye to mouth
perhaps we all get to that edge
where the moon remembers sorrow

you are not here
to whisper me to sleep

storms plays echo across the sky
I find the wind and weep"


~ Lauren, you express your inner-most sadness of your loss very well here, especially, to me, in the stanzas I have pasted above.


Susan Caldwell
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15 posted 04-28-2004 08:50 AM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

"I trace the blue trickle of tears
with lonely fingers
weaving the black from eye to mouth
perhaps we all get to that edge
where the moon remembers sorrow"

I find it very difficult to respond to what you write..the depth leaves me without words..


"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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16 posted 04-28-2004 08:03 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Greeneyes

Susan~

that a beautiful compliment thank you so much...hugssss

~~**~~
The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you
~~**~~

Greeneyes
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17 posted 04-28-2004 08:04 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Greeneyes

thank you are for reading this humble offering....I appreciate your time more then you know....

~~~~

Mike...I emailed you...

~~**~~
The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you
~~**~~

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ihe most sweetest poem from the sweetest most wonderful big sister..i loved this peom kep it upp..
love::
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