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Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

0 posted 2004-04-13 02:40 PM


contentions kill
what hopes remain
as i exhume
what best lay buried

purpose corroded
by the pine
of self-reflection

no longer pacified
in the hermitage

in an empty
sleepless bed
another piece dies

slight edit, retitle and repost from sanctuary

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SEA
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with you
1 posted 2004-04-13 04:09 PM


this feels so sad....have missed reading you
Toerag
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since 1999-07-29
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Ala bam a
2 posted 2004-04-13 04:12 PM


Photo removed?!!?...yea, they removed mine too....it was a nude....like the write critter...welldone...as always..
Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

3 posted 2004-04-13 04:43 PM


contentions kill
what hopes remain
as i exhume
what best lay buried


Hey Bello...
This speaks volumes to me.

I'm glad I caught this sad yet wonderful write by you.

keeping it.

Maree

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

Grover
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since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada
4 posted 2004-04-13 04:45 PM


Enjoyed this!
Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
5 posted 2004-04-13 04:56 PM


Much enjoyed the read Raph.
Hugs~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
   is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
6 posted 2004-04-13 05:09 PM


I wish your photo was up and running again! I pine over the lost reflection!



EA

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
7 posted 2004-04-13 05:17 PM


You need more sunshine, dear Raffaele.

This is a great write, even so very melancholic.

Abbracci.
Margherita

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA
8 posted 2004-04-13 05:47 PM


Look, you know I've already bawled me eyes out today at LOTR, and now this?

Somebody help me.

Those first lines are killers.

Digging up the past can be a bad thing, but this poem, i'm glad you did.  

Local Rebel
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since 1999-12-21
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Southern Abstentia
9 posted 2004-04-13 07:04 PM


akhuna mattata mate...

dig as always

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
10 posted 2004-04-13 11:36 PM


Thanks to all, gemma i told you to stop looking at my face..it makes me cry too
passing shadows
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displaced
11 posted 2004-04-14 03:01 AM


I know what you mean Raph

piece by piece

Susan Caldwell
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Florida
12 posted 2004-04-14 08:34 PM


"purpose corroded
by the pine
of self-reflection"

Loved that stanza best..

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
13 posted 2004-04-28 11:58 AM


danke guys
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