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mytuesdaywishes
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a voice from the musicbox


0 posted 04-12-2004 07:59 PM       View Profile for mytuesdaywishes   Email mytuesdaywishes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for mytuesdaywishes

you will be my sweetest memory
i so wanted to be just like you
with your easy confidence
and perfect dreams.
the things i did to myself
just for attention
were emotionally exhausting
more than damaging.
some scars i want to remain forever
like the way the rain smells
and the hint of a smile
on the lips of a feeling
i could never know.
the clouds breathe fire at each other
as i sit on a bus that i've waited for
for far too long.
i am a landlord for
the most brilliant heart.
the one who's lived in me
never payed their rent.
but i only evicted them long after
they were gone.
i hold onto my inner massochistic moments
because we tend to shine the most
when we struggle.
such beautifully paradoxical creatures
we are.
i am a sentimental cynic
with no way to connect with
each minute of my life
passing me by.
call me sometime
let me know you love me more
everyday of your life.
i cried when i left you
although you didn't see it
i cried for the smile
you wake up with every morning
and i cried for the song
you left me with
and the habits
i've knowingly picked up from you.
but i laugh when i think of you
because i so want to be like you
and not care when the light shifts
or when people walk away.
at the same time i think
you could be so great
if you only cried a little
because you and me
we're the same.
we tend to shine the most
when we struggle.

joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless...

© Copyright 2004 Rachael - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
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since 08-04-99
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1 posted 04-12-2004 08:26 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Jeez...I was just thinking of you and BANG! here you are.

WOW Rachel...

You leave me speechless, the phrasing, the imagery, the ALL of you.

it's a keeper

Maree.

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

exhale
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since 06-13-2003
Posts 648
Alberta,Canada


2 posted 04-12-2004 09:39 PM       View Profile for exhale   Email exhale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for exhale

such beautifully paradoxical creatures
we are.

so true so true.
your words speak of wisdom and of hurt,i could feel every word of this like vibrations from your heart.
incredible write
passing shadows
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displaced


3 posted 04-13-2004 03:22 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

wonderfully done!
Grover
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since 01-27-2004
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London, ON, Canada


4 posted 04-13-2004 11:37 AM       View Profile for Grover   Email Grover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Grover's Home Page   View IP for Grover

Wow! A superb write... exceptional write! Really like the image, "the clouds breathe fire at each other"
iliana
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since 12-05-2003
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5 posted 04-13-2004 01:17 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Whoooooa, the depth of this -- amazing writing!   ......jo
Janet Marie
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6 posted 05-26-2004 09:17 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

some scars i want to remain forever
like the way the rain smells
and the hint of a smile
on the lips of a feeling
i could never know.

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i am a landlord for
the most brilliant heart.
the one who's lived in me
never payed their rent.
but i only evicted them long after
they were gone.
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i am a landlord for
the most brilliant heart.



what a very cool personify and analogy that is. another impressive write from you.


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