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mytuesdaywishes
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since 2003-09-05
Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox

0 posted 2004-04-12 07:59 PM


you will be my sweetest memory
i so wanted to be just like you
with your easy confidence
and perfect dreams.
the things i did to myself
just for attention
were emotionally exhausting
more than damaging.
some scars i want to remain forever
like the way the rain smells
and the hint of a smile
on the lips of a feeling
i could never know.
the clouds breathe fire at each other
as i sit on a bus that i've waited for
for far too long.
i am a landlord for
the most brilliant heart.
the one who's lived in me
never payed their rent.
but i only evicted them long after
they were gone.
i hold onto my inner massochistic moments
because we tend to shine the most
when we struggle.
such beautifully paradoxical creatures
we are.
i am a sentimental cynic
with no way to connect with
each minute of my life
passing me by.
call me sometime
let me know you love me more
everyday of your life.
i cried when i left you
although you didn't see it
i cried for the smile
you wake up with every morning
and i cried for the song
you left me with
and the habits
i've knowingly picked up from you.
but i laugh when i think of you
because i so want to be like you
and not care when the light shifts
or when people walk away.
at the same time i think
you could be so great
if you only cried a little
because you and me
we're the same.
we tend to shine the most
when we struggle.

joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless...

© Copyright 2004 Rachael - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

1 posted 2004-04-12 08:26 PM


Jeez...I was just thinking of you and BANG! here you are.

WOW Rachel...

You leave me speechless, the phrasing, the imagery, the ALL of you.

it's a keeper

Maree.

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

exhale
Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646
Alberta,Canada
2 posted 2004-04-12 09:39 PM


such beautifully paradoxical creatures
we are.

so true so true.
your words speak of wisdom and of hurt,i could feel every word of this like vibrations from your heart.
incredible write

passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
3 posted 2004-04-13 03:22 AM


wonderfully done!
Grover
Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada
4 posted 2004-04-13 11:37 AM


Wow! A superb write... exceptional write! Really like the image, "the clouds breathe fire at each other"
iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
5 posted 2004-04-13 01:17 PM


Whoooooa, the depth of this -- amazing writing!   ......jo
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2004-05-26 09:17 AM


some scars i want to remain forever
like the way the rain smells
and the hint of a smile
on the lips of a feeling
i could never know.

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i am a landlord for
the most brilliant heart.
the one who's lived in me
never payed their rent.
but i only evicted them long after
they were gone.
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i am a landlord for
the most brilliant heart.



what a very cool personify and analogy that is. another impressive write from you.



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