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swatcatpettus
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0 posted 2004-04-12 02:19 AM


Shackled,
shackled to a ladder,
staring at the feet of that one person who did better than you,
looking down past the prisoners into the abyss,
wondering where's the end,
the top also unclear,
a blinding light shown down onto your eyes,only forcing you to look down,
down at the nothingness, the emptyness,
everyday the hooded move you up or down,
putting you into ranks,
the infinate top the best,
the infinate bottom the worst,
never knowing where the line is,
never knowing what a line is,
the system,
welcome to it,
fight it

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-04-12 02:22 AM


maybe there is no top

good write...made me think

passing shadows
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btw, welcome to Passions
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3 posted 2004-04-12 06:28 AM



very interesting thought here, I myself prefer to think of moving forward rather than moving "up", at least that way you can't plummet. I've enjoyed your first post and hope you enjoy your stay here.
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4 posted 2004-04-12 04:26 PM


I thought this very gallant.  Perhaps we must draw the line, and decide what makes our successes...the truth is that if we don't see them, what does it matter?
Welcome, and hope to read you again.
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5 posted 2004-04-12 04:41 PM


Hello, welcome to PIP! An intense write!
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6 posted 2004-04-13 05:43 PM


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