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inkedgoddess
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0 posted 2004-04-11 07:27 AM



I am the stars, abandonned, mourning the moon
the sky , its refuge that seals safe her fate
tears of rain that rip apart the cold eyes of night
love unrequited and unclaimed, discarded,
the unmet desires of the light longing to crown the luna
this godless night

i am the moon that turns her face and strays in darkness
seeking solitude, seeking respite in a swallowed sky,
from all that drains the light, the ones that fall seeking shelter
in her signature smile that erases their starcrossed plight

i am the sea that resonates the sorcery of the onxy sky
the requiem march of love lunged deep,
the maker of waves that gallop in flight,
the echo of miles of sea,the birthing
of perpetual dreams that sugarcoat the night


to the deep abyss of lonliness, i come in love,
only to be stabbed by the needle of deception
seeking sanctuary in this well of plentitude


i cry to birth the dawn as love goes sour, love goes astray

i will come again

as i unravel then mend

i will ascend as the foliage of forestial rain
at the threshold of doom ,i am the fallout foam
in an overflowing ocean that came
her kissing sands begging beneath
drinking the passions of the storms she brings


i am my own antedote, time and again,
absorbed in the mystical haze as i transcend
on whims, in detachment
from the truth of pain,

i am the cleansing rain
the creator of my self,
i remain



[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (04-11-2004 09:35 AM).]

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1 posted 2004-04-11 10:05 AM


This is one amazing write, and I am surprised that it has sort of drifted down the page of poetry. Enjoyed the sad beauty of this. hugs, Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2004-04-11 10:33 AM


You paint the sorrow with a far seeing, self fulfilling dream...and that is the truth of how it is to transcend.
Hugs,
TD

iliana
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3 posted 2004-04-11 12:46 PM


Pure poetry of nature -- Inked, this is an amazing piece.  I've never read a poem quite like it, the play of life in nature, beautifully penned!  
Spiros Zafiris
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4 posted 2004-04-11 01:24 PM


..indeed--very songlike, too--much enjoyed--


spiros

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5 posted 2004-04-11 01:33 PM


"to the deep abyss of lonliness, i come in love,
only to be stabbed by the needle of deception"

I can relate. So beautiful and so vivid your images. I had to read it twice just because I liked it so much. and the ending, just a wonderful close. As always I enjoyed reading your thoughts.
~Live and Laugh~

The nice thing about being a pesimest is that your either right, or pleasantly surprised.
~Bella~

passing shadows
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6 posted 2004-04-11 01:36 PM


yes, you are all that and 32 flavors
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7 posted 2004-04-11 08:06 PM


nice write
inkedgoddess
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8 posted 2004-04-11 11:10 PM


thanks for reading, thanks for sharing
bklynboy
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9 posted 2004-04-13 08:31 AM


Wow this is the longest thing you have done....i have to read it a few more times to comprehend it. Stay tuned!
Enchantress
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10 posted 2004-04-13 08:47 AM


This is amazing!
This is beautiful!!
This is pure poetry at it's finest!!

~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
   is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

sea_of_okc
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11 posted 2004-04-13 09:33 AM


Wow, this is such a powerful piece. There is such strength in your words.

quote:
i am my own antedote, time and again,
absorbed in the mystical haze as i transcend
on whims, in detachment
from the truth of pain,

i am the cleansing rain
the creator of my self,
i remain


I love these lines... always it comes back to us, to the power we have within to overcome whatever life sends our way...
Awesome write.

Toerag
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12 posted 2004-04-13 09:43 AM


dixie says you're 32 flavors....can I taste a few?
Dark Angel
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13 posted 2004-04-13 05:19 PM


Quite a powerful write...

and this...

i am the fallout foam
in an overflowing ocean that came
her kissing sands begging beneath
drinking the passions of the storms she brings


my favourite.

Enjoyed muchly.

Maree


Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

Earth Angel
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14 posted 2004-04-13 07:21 PM



Besides being a goddess, did anyone tell you that you are one heck of a fine poetess? Well, I'm adding my voice to the multitude! lol

"i am the cleansing rain
the creator of my self,
i remain"

~ Indeed you are! ~ and do!


EA

inkedgoddess
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15 posted 2004-04-13 10:11 PM


thanks for reading and replying as always, it is much appreciated
pictureme
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16 posted 2004-04-13 11:06 PM


An enjoyable read. I especially liked the last stanza and the ending line.
nice job,
pictureme :-)

choshi
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17 posted 2004-04-16 09:21 AM


YOur mix of fantastic imagery and emotions  here is amazing....throughout....I really appreciate the wisdom of the following lines:

i am my own antedote, time and again,
absorbed in the mystical haze as i transcend
on whims, in detachment
from the truth of pain,


    ~P



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