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Pilgrimage
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0 posted 2004-04-05 08:35 PM



Early Afternoon

A cool breeze sails across the plains
to bring a scent that whispers 'rain'.
The trees bow to a sudden blow,
I scan the sky through shaking panes.

As clouds pile up in sulfur rows
and hoard their gifts like treasure troves
a spot lands on the glass and then
a splat, a splash, a stream.  It grows.

A sodden scene whipped by the wind,
a driven blast like dreams of sin
within a virgin's aching breast.
Then all at once, the hail begins.

A pebbled surf, a frozen crest
on flowered seas, a madman's jest.
The ice-gods laugh and toss their bits
of heaven-stuff.  Do we feel blest?

The old elm grits his twigs and sits
through Mother Nature's temper-fits.
Unmoved by loss of leaves and limbs,
he grabs his roots and never quits.

The thunder softens.  Muffled hymns
sung by a choir of broken stems,
with wounded-daffodil refrain,
drifts through a dusk that grays and dims.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
1 posted 2004-04-05 08:55 PM


The old elm grits his twigs and sits
through Mother Nature's temper-fits.
Unmoved by loss of leaves and limbs,
he grabs his roots and never quits

Well this is quite an afternoon delight,
and just what I needed.  

Loved your message,  and the visuals~

Sadelite
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2 posted 2004-04-05 09:12 PM


The old elm grits his twigs and sits
through Mother Nature's temper-fits.
Unmoved by loss of leaves and limbs,
he grabs his roots and never quits.

Nice...  I especially enjoyed this part.
               Sadie

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3 posted 2004-04-06 02:27 AM


this is great!
Susan Caldwell
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4 posted 2004-04-06 09:40 AM


Oh Nan this is beautiful!

It reads like a song...perfect!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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5 posted 2004-04-06 11:09 AM


GirlFriend~
You've got so danged much talent !!!
and NO ... my nose didn't grow !
This is absolutely wonderful~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Earth Angel
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6 posted 2004-04-06 11:14 AM


~ I suppose that is a good indication of much I adored this poem on Mother Nature's tempestuous side! lol

I felt it! I saw it! I loved it!


EA

Pilgrimage
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7 posted 2004-04-06 11:04 PM


Gee, guys, thanks.  I'm not fully satisfied with it, but I'm so pleased you liked it.  

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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