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Of Strike and Srars
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Of Strike and Srars |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Of Strike and Stars I struck a rock in simmers boil Racked the wind into a whorl Flung my arms up to the sky And then I shed a tear in cry Frustration paint my face in red Silence mourned me like the dead But butterflies they clapped their wings And even birds and insect things I thank them with a bend of neck I even did a genuflect And said as much in prides orate To thank them for their concentrate I did an encore rhymed in true Like puffs of wind into the blue And tolled the bells within my well To spread the words and said farewell It’s then I truly went to sleep And covered me with stars for keep |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But butterflies they clapped their wings And even birds and insect things I thank them with a bend of neck I even did a genuflect And said as much in prides orate To thank them for their concentrate =================================== *smiling at you*  loving this tribute to Mother Nature Sy-babers...ya got some great lines in this gem of pen...I bet there were some moths clapping along with the butterflies. *L*  Love your closing couplet too. *ww*    |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Nothing like sleeping under a blanket of stars. Well done, Sy. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"It’s then I truly went to sleep And covered me with stars for keep" Love this ending couplet Sy... Such a warm thought.... Lovey lovey write m'friend. ~Morning hugs & tea, Nancy~ ~Before befriending butterflies |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ You simply reach for the stars in every penning~  AND ... you touch them every time~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I did an encore rhymed in true Like puffs of wind into the blue And tolled the bells within my well To spread the words and said farewell ~*~ See? All we need is that one last rhyme to make us happy... Bless you for all of them. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
loved this star gazing write |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Sy~ This one really touched me. It reminded me of the world in which my nephew lives. Thank you for painting it with pretty colors. Thank you."cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
A sleep under the stars makes us all feel free. Nicely captured in this write, I loves the feelings this one evoked! ^*-Kimberley-*^  "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Good morning, Mr. T.! ~ I can see it all now! You on a cliff top flinging your arms up to the sky and whipping the wind into a whorl. You genuflect to your adoring audience of appreciative birds and insect things. Then after your illustrious oration, you slip into a peaceful slumber beneath a canopy of stars!  Angel hugs 'n kisses, EA |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
'Whorl' is a new one to me Sy but I like it. Glad I'm not playing poetry scrabble with you......... Nicely done! Eric |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
don't know if you struck a rock, but one thing I do know is you most certainly ROCK! outstanding write...good good morning Sy How are ya? Hope all is well and you and yours has a lovely day, thanks for the 3rd cup of coffee this moring, very aromatic!  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
"I struck a rock in simmers boil" What a interesting contrasting image and play on words. I liked your poem very much. Sadie |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
It’s then I truly went to sleep And covered me with stars for keep'''' ~ what a peaceful way to fall asleep...  lovely image Sy...~~**~~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Well I was hoping one moth would. LOL WWRS scorpio Thanks for the well done. Nancy, Thanks for the lovely. Marge, Huglets back you sweet thing. Sunshine, You are just a love. Midnitesun, Love your reply. Susan, Thank you, hugs back. Kim, You are a sweetheart. Earth Angel, Now that will get you a hug and a kiss. Eric, LOL thank you my friend. LeeJ Good morning to you and waving back. Sadie, I like your reply even more. Greeneyes, Sweet comment thank you dear. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
vandana Thank you dear. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Well, those stars do inspire you in quite an extraordinary way, dear Seymour! Love, Margherita |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Margherita Thank you sweety for the read and eply. |
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