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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2004-04-05 07:04 AM

Hang the trees with rain

lament the sky shed afterbirth
trails of blood drenched towers
lay like doormats
for holymen to roll down,

bowling pin people scream
with guernicca face
prayers for salvation
knock on eternal doors,

rings on rings
concentric circles
bounce off padded walls
above,

ever ringing echoes
taint white virgin clouds

ring the world in rain,

tears burst of twisted intestines
broken hearted clouds

hang the world in rain,

tomorrow's karma
swept up as it falls

Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

1 posted 2004-04-05 07:31 AM

"hang the world in rain"

WOW, this was a very powerful write.
You should be very happy with this piece
its my most favourite of yours
and its headed straight for my library!!

^*-Kimberley-*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2004-04-05 11:22 AM

This write brought to mind the larger state of the world for some reason...
A personal touch upon the anguish and restlessness of gray skies.
You convey emotions so well Inked One.
Hugs,
TD

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2004-04-05 11:52 AM

Reality is harsh, and your poem conveys that so well,
oh inkedgoddess one!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2004-04-05 12:29 PM

Excellent write Michele...
So true..so true.
Hugs~

~Before befriending butterflies
you have to meet with midnight moths.~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2004-04-05 12:36 PM

oh ouch

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2004-04-05 02:40 PM

InkyOne~

Sifting through the layers ...
I found soft beauty in this -

'rings on rings
concentric circles
bounce off padded walls
above,

ever ringing echoes
taint white virgin clouds'

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

noles1@totcon.com

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

7 posted 2004-04-05 09:58 PM

interesting.....very interesting

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

8 posted 2004-04-06 12:58 PM

You have penned strong images here, dear Michelle.
Apocalyptical rain.
Excellent write.
Love, Margherita

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

9 posted 2004-04-07 06:22 AM

thanks for hearing me rant

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