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Broken
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The woods

0 posted 2004-04-04 12:56 PM



DEAR MISS "EERIE"

You never knew me
You never saw me
While you were translucent
Transparant to the dot

Still I refused to see
What I saw
Still I denied to see
What you were not

You perfidious coquette
You voluptuous libertine
I'd like you to know
You haughty pestilence
That your conductions
Failed to founder me

Yet I was no better
I said love
And meant nothing
I smiled of course
And thought never

Insted I
In a state of reverie
Wished you to be far away
While your kisses tasted snow
And I dreamt of buds in May

So accept this grandiloquent ode
As a bitter
Yet candid adieu
With heartfelt hopes of never
To see your dead
Pallor face again

© Copyright 2004 Jay Hartson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-04-04 01:02 AM


very good
passing shadows
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2 posted 2004-04-04 04:09 AM


ouch
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just out of reach
3 posted 2004-04-04 09:46 AM


Wow....I think she should get the point of these words! Well done. Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

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4 posted 2004-04-09 12:22 PM


some deep wounds here   know how ya feel


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5 posted 2004-04-09 02:09 PM


In a state of reverie
Wished you to be far away
While your kisses tasted snow
And I dreamt of buds in May

~*~

I'm going to be watching
for more of your writings...

Grover
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6 posted 2004-04-09 07:56 PM


Choice diction, excellent write!
Martie
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7 posted 2004-04-09 08:21 PM


Very emotive writing.....well done!
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8 posted 2004-04-09 10:23 PM


very, very EERIE, broken
  but a good emotive write   hello!

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9 posted 2004-04-09 10:26 PM


Very nicley done and much enjoyed!
Hugs~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
   is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

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