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The Homecoming

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Fisherman
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0 posted 04-03-2004 12:35 AM       View Profile for Fisherman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fisherman

The air hung as heavy
as yellowed drapes
in threadbare disrepair-
smelling the smell
of must and dust
amid shadowed forms
and weathered shapes
she reminisced
of passions missed-
reaching out
but not quite touching
a thought that was not there
except within a memory
entombed in darkened room-
with air hanging as heavy
as yellowed drapes
in threadbare disrepair.
© Copyright 2004 Fisherman - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 04-03-2004 03:29 AM       View Profile for MGROVES   Email MGROVES   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MGROVES

beautifully put

Kicking Kim
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2 posted 04-03-2004 06:06 AM       View Profile for Kicking Kim   Email Kicking Kim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kicking Kim's Home Page   View IP for Kicking Kim

"she reminisced
of passions missed-"
I love these rhyming couplets which you used.
They give the rhythm a bit of zest!
I really enjoyed this write!!

^*-Kimberley-*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

ethome
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3 posted 04-03-2004 07:43 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Man those first few lines with such excellent metaphors are really capturing.
The scene becomes very vivid right away.

Eric

Ain't doin nothin at all
Just answerin the call
Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 04-03-2004 07:47 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Fisherman
You netted a fish with this one. Enjoyed
Martie
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fisherman

You set the mood of this with some great imagery...very much enjoyed!
Enchantress
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Very nicely penned....loved the imagery.
Welcome to Passions!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

  ~Before befriending butterflies
you have to meet with midnight moths.~

Grover
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You're a good writer, fisherman.
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside


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reaching out
but not quite touching
a thought that was not there
except within a memory

You set the mood to mind, and I cannot only feel this,
I can see it so clearly.

Wonderful writing, Fisherman~
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just out of reach


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Wonderful -  I am putting this into my library! Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

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A homecoming?
LOl, I wish you would repost your original fish tale, the one I just discovered in the archives, one you posted long before I joined Pips.
I thoroughly enjoyed this one tonight, but?
I was ROTFLMAO at that post from long ago.
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she reminisced
of passions missed-
reaching out
but not quite touching
a thought that was not there
except within a memory
entombed in darkened room-

~*~

How did you know?
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural


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enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
 
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