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Darker Season
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since 2004-04-01
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Wisconsin

0 posted 2004-04-01 08:00 PM


Being There

You are such a special girl.There is no one as good as you.
You are the best I have in life, my dream that has come true.
So I'll make you this one promise; if no one else can hear your prayer
Just close your eyes and dream and dream, and baby, I'll be there.

I'm so glad that you are with me, and I'm so thankful this is real
Because there's nothing better in my life than the way you make me feel.
But if your life gets filled with pain and the good times get too rare
Just close your eyes and dream and dream, and baby, I'll be there.

I wish that I could show you just exactly what you're worth
Because I know that you are perfect,You are and angel here on earth
But this world isn't heaven. And if it ever fills you with despair
Just close your eyes and dream and dream, and baby, I'll be there.

I hope you trust these words because I mean it when I say
That for you I would do anything, I will help you find your way.
But if you still get lost somehow and no one seems to care,
Just close your eyes and dream and dream, and baby, I'll be there.

You are a shooting star, I see you sailing through the sky
But sometimes I can tell that you're not sure where to fly
So if you want me by your side to guide you through the air
Just close your eyes and dream and dream, and baby, I'll be there.

Watch me as I fly, watch me as I fly.I finally have it all.
But something isn't right, something isn't right. I'm about to fall.

YOU left ME

You said you no longer want me.You said it was all a big mistake
And now I feel the emptiness of undeserved heartache.
And in the end, I've figured out, this world isn't fair
Because I've closed my eyes to dream a dream, but baby, you're not there.

By Andrew /J*M




[This message has been edited by Darker Season (04-01-2004 09:31 PM).]

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zippi
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since 2004-03-31
Posts 56
California
1 posted 2004-04-01 08:59 PM


Trememdously sad, I could almost hear this being sung by a soft-rock group. Very nice flow. Rene`
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
2 posted 2004-04-02 02:24 AM


I understand well
Kicking Kim
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since 2001-04-16
Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!
3 posted 2004-04-02 06:28 AM


What a wonderful write.
I can see your heartache and pain in this.
I too have been through these exact emotions.

Giving your whole life to someone
and offering undivided dedication
only for them to leave
taking a part of your heart
and leaving a void.

Keep smiling
it confuses people!


^*-Kimberley-*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

4 posted 2004-04-02 06:34 AM




Such a wonderful write, filled with so many feelings of love and devotion...extraordinarily done, very much enjoyed this unique offering.  Thank you for sharing.  Lee J.

Grover
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since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada
5 posted 2004-04-02 03:27 PM


Well hopefully-- you've moved on since 2001. Enjoyed reading this!
Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
6 posted 2004-04-02 03:36 PM


Extremely well written.
Very much enjoyed the read.
Hugs~

  ~Before befriending butterflies
you have to meet with midnight moths.~

*Inque Monroe*
Junior Member
since 2003-10-18
Posts 43
No where special
7 posted 2004-04-10 07:35 PM


Darker Season,

That poem had so much emotion, its really good, the twist at the end is something oh so true, I believe everyone at sometime in there life has felt that, I know I have. your an amazing artist, write more.

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