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Elizabeth Santos
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Awake

The dawn has opened up her clouded eye
And gathered raindrops sprinkled from the sky
She stirred the mist that settled in the night
And raised her head to kiss the edge of light

An antlered buck stood grand and statuesque
His robust silhouette was firmly pressed
Against the pinkish sky and shadowed deep
On fields, a figure stenciled black and steep

His marble eye was hypnotized and gazed
To where the darts of light had pierced the haze
For when the darkness of the night was done
His chest basked full and pompous in the sun

The dawn had woken up a fresh new day
Before it tiptoed silently away
It roused the earth to sight and touch and sound
And prancing hoof across the dewy ground

Elizabeth Santos
April 1, 2004
© Copyright 2004 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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Liz

This is so lovely!  I'm looking forward to seeing this from your window!  
Enchantress
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So very beautiful Elizabeth.
I so much enjoyed the read.
Into my library it goes!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

  ~Before befriending butterflies
you have to meet with midnight moths.~

Seymour Tabin
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Elizabeth,
A delight to read. Thank you for posting.
Grover
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Wow! A delightful poem, such cadence!
ethome
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Beautiful scene Elizabeth and illustrated with such marvelous metaphors.
Wonderful write!

Eric
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wow, this flows smoothly, rhymes perfectly, and still it fulfills everything a poem should... with perfect images and smiles.
I love it.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

INclan
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A well captured scene.  Well written!

INclan
ice
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A beautiful poem, Elizabeth
enjoyed
_______ice
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passing shadows
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you always describe with colors of the rainbow
LeeJ
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The dawn had woken up a fresh new day
Before it tiptoed silently away
It roused the earth to sight and touch and sound
And prancing hoof across the dewy ground

Liz, it's so good to read you... Good morning!  Thank you for such a beautiful read!
Denise
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Absolutely beautiful, Elizabeth! Love that iambic pentameter too!

I'm awake, waiting for that first light to get on the road! I fell asleep waaaay too early last night and have been up since 3 a.m.

See you all soon!

Artic Wind
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Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
 
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