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0 posted 2004-03-30 12:25 PM



Desert(ed)
~*~
(a Nonet)
`
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How far can I drive into the sand
on half-a-tank of gas fuming?
A mirage in poloroid
of emotion captured,
instant clarity
to answer why
the cactus
won't cry
here.

© Copyright 2004 Dawn van Krieken-Smith - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-03-30 01:13 PM


A profound image here.
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2 posted 2004-03-30 02:23 PM


Very well done. hugs, Chris

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3 posted 2004-03-30 02:51 PM


quote:
to answer why
the cactus
won't cry
here.
...cool

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4 posted 2004-03-30 02:53 PM


Excellent Dawn!
Love this form.
Hugs~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
   Has held me in the same embrace ~

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5 posted 2004-03-30 04:39 PM


I especially love this...

to answer why
the cactus
won't cry
here.



Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

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6 posted 2004-03-30 04:40 PM


This is a simple form, but you get something profound from it. Well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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7 posted 2004-03-30 04:42 PM


Very well done...Clever.

Eric

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8 posted 2004-03-30 04:43 PM


Clever!

Love, Margherita

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9 posted 2004-03-31 08:26 AM


Very good and cleer writing Dawn...i liked it..

Thank you...Goldenrose....


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10 posted 2004-03-31 09:27 AM


How far can I drive into the sand
on half-a-tank of gas fuming?
A mirage in poloroid
of emotion captured,
instant clarity
to answer why
the cactus
won't cry
here.

SO great to be back  and to find your amazing poem. You have pulled so much image and feeling..great!     ~P


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11 posted 2004-03-31 12:42 PM


as always...excellent!
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12 posted 2004-03-31 01:04 PM


so few words can say oh so much .... amazing
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