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EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

0 posted 2004-03-30 03:40 AM

My Journal

At daybreak Dawn tapped upon the casement,
And bathed my bleary eyes with rays of light,
She asked me to rise without malcontent,
And waggle off the abstruse dreams of night.

She gave me a ledger titled "My Day,"
The pages were unmarked; no splash of ink,
And she bid me to record what I may,
With the deeds I'd do and thoughts I'd think.

So I used the hours to write my tale,
Filling the pages until finger sore,
Yea my reflections seemed brittle and stale,
But my thoughts had to be accounted for.

That evening I read my words once again,
And I felt a tremor within my heart,
They were filled with anger, hatred, disdain,
Aye incessant complaints for the most part.

I wish I'd written a better memoir,
In retrospection ere you take a look,
Tomorrow before I write au revoir,
I'll write of compassion in this...my book.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2004-03-30 03:57 AM

a much needed message here Kevin

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2004-03-30 09:04 AM

"I wish I'd written a better memoir,
In retrospection ere you take a look,
Tomorrow before I write au revoir,
I'll write of compassion in this...my book."

Wonderful Kevin...I especially enjoyed this closing stanza.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
Has held me in the same embrace ~

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

3 posted 2004-03-30 09:39 AM

Wow, Kevin, I love this write.

I think words of the heart have to spill the

"anger, hatred, disdain,
Aye incessant complaints for the most part."

in order to get to the matters of the heart.

Therein lies the compassion "in this...my book."

Bravo! ~K~

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

4 posted 2004-03-30 10:30 AM

This is a good example youve set

I think im going to try and follow it..
great writing

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

5 posted 2004-03-30 09:48 PM

EV2,

Great words to live by. Excellent read and write. I enjoyed it very much and would like to take this one to my library.
Sadie

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

6 posted 2004-03-31 01:44 AM

I remember this poem. :-)
Reminds me of me. :-)

I love it though.

Ribbits and Ribbits
Always

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

7 posted 2004-03-31 01:47 AM

Love that ending.....

Eric

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