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Foxyoasis
Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

0 posted 2004-03-29 07:26 PM



feeling of lost and hope
as the blood runs cold
in my body i float off
to a distance time
and regain my strength

only to be broken up
again as the clouds
parts so do my hearts
your smile isnt the
same anymore

the way you talk
and walk is forgein
to me your gental
touch has lost itself
in your rough exterior

my legs grow weak my
heart bleeds with pain
the sooner the better the
joy will soon come hopefully
will stick around instead
of jumping the gun.


unedited

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


© Copyright 2004 Julie O'Neill - All Rights Reserved
loner187
Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 106
Upstate New York
1 posted 2004-03-29 08:20 PM


I was left speechless after reading this. It's incredibly good, I could feel the emotion without. Nice job!

-Amanda

"Love doesn't make the world go 'round. Love is what makes the ride worthwhile."
   -Franklin P. Jones

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2004-03-30 06:32 PM


I hate it when joy jumps the gun...James
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