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A Single Bottle

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Tequilia_Sunrise
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0 posted 03-27-2004 01:20 AM       View Profile for Tequilia_Sunrise   Email Tequilia_Sunrise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Tequilia_Sunrise



A single bottle standing alone in an emtpy room,
A room with bright colors and cheer.
A cork fills the mouth of the bottle
Holding everything inside'
Faces of anger and faces of pain
What Damage is could cause
If that cork were to be removed
The distored faces scattering around the room
Taking the color
Stripping the room of cheer
Capturing all the happiness
So joy and delight would fill the bottle instead
And be trapped inside
Faces controting and swirling
Around the once happy room
But the bottle just sits there,
Alone
With its cork
How much can it hold?
© Copyright 2004 Amanda Seymour - All Rights Reserved
Sadelite
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1 posted 03-27-2004 02:48 AM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

This is an incredible write.  I could visualize every bit of this, though there are no bottles here.  Thank you for sharing.
By the way, I like the picture of you and your dog.  It seems to be a happy fella/o.
I sure hope others stop by soon to read your work.  They wouldn't want to miss this.
                Sadie (Sadelite)
bbent
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2 posted 03-27-2004 02:52 AM       View Profile for bbent   Email bbent   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit bbent's Home Page   View IP for bbent

I liked this rather strange write.Not sure if the bottle's a person or actual bottle,maybe even a drug or alcohol but anyway dosn't sound like popping the corks gonna lead to much good.Interesting poem with lots to think about and relate too.enjoyed

Live like it's your last day...
Dance like nobody's watching...
Love like you've never been hurt...

passing shadows
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yeah...I relate
MGROVES
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4 posted 03-27-2004 08:30 PM       View Profile for MGROVES   Email MGROVES   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MGROVES

this was very good. much insight. i have seen and lived the disasters of the bottle. i live with one. thanks for sharing

Grover
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5 posted 03-28-2004 10:53 AM       View Profile for Grover   Email Grover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Grover's Home Page   View IP for Grover

Excellent metaphor!
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6 posted 03-28-2004 03:16 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

well done, be it metaphor or reality
the bottle reflects whether empty or filled
Pilgrimage
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7 posted 03-28-2004 08:27 PM       View Profile for Pilgrimage   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pilgrimage

This is good.  You should probably throw the bottle out the window.  I don't see much good coming from it sitting there waiting to pop.  Well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Tequilia_Sunrise
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8 posted 07-05-2004 02:35 AM       View Profile for Tequilia_Sunrise   Email Tequilia_Sunrise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tequilia_Sunrise

thankx everyone for your lovely comments
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