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Grover
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0 posted 2004-03-26 02:54 PM



Cruise


twisted tank tops
soldiers marching
in line beat
two three four
two three four
teen girls walking
through the mall.


©2004 Grover Gall

© Copyright 2004 Grover Gall - All Rights Reserved
DavePage
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1 posted 2004-03-26 03:36 PM


Grover

Where do the words of someone over a hedge stop

when localised violence it
Something on a Tony Blair/George Bush Junior

Statistic

I like your words mate

Dave

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2 posted 2004-03-26 05:15 PM


yes, they are on a mission!

i enjoyed this tiny little slice of observation here

ethome
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3 posted 2004-03-26 06:57 PM


Sorry Grover I went all perverse on you man....I'll have to read this again...

Eric

I love what it did for me though...

Ain't doin nothin at all
Just answerin the call
Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~

Enchantress
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4 posted 2004-03-26 07:01 PM


Well done Grover...much enjoyed.
Hugs~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
   Has held me in the same embrace ~

iliana
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5 posted 2004-03-27 01:00 AM


This reminded me of when I was that age -- guys and dolls alike would cruise the local Big Boy drive in (no malls back then close enough to cruise) after games on Friday night -- not tank tops then -- just tanks!  lol  -- enjoyed.     .......jo
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6 posted 2004-03-27 01:07 AM


LOL, I've seen this scene
Kahlil
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7 posted 2004-03-27 01:14 AM


ooo, I remember that cruise feeling!  
Hip-hugger bellbottoms with (non-pierced) bellybuttons showing...  I like the way you wrote this.   ~K~

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8 posted 2004-03-27 02:34 AM


Grover,
   Your twenty words completely filled my mind with vivid moving pictures.
              Sadie  

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9 posted 2004-03-27 03:54 AM


yes, I remember those days
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10 posted 2004-03-27 08:25 PM


i remember those days too. and each day i see a friend or family member whose life has been hell as results from the war. very sad. thanks for sharing
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11 posted 2004-03-28 09:58 PM


I prefer to think of them as the minions of merchandising, the economic avante garde of capitalism, the imperial guard of economic development...but soldiers is cool too...nice write...
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