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Preaching to the Drowning
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Preaching to the Drowning |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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How many tears will it take to fill the glass you empty every time I fail to blur the line between fantasy and reality? The only perfection I come close to is that of exact rage, whereas your liquid muse sinks deep into the places where your spine used to rest, consuming what's left of your waning dignity and foolish pride. I've learned never to mix love with commonsense, they tend to leave a bitter aftertaste that’s harder to swallow than the amber lies you’re drowning in. let me leave you to pray to the bartender in his floating pulpit while I thumb a ride home. I know somewhere there's sobering solace waiting for me, because the truth just wasn’t dry enough for you leave the glass full. |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
This reads like a very harsh dose of reality. I do hope it is just your muse. IT is great writing. alan |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Sad write, but so impressive that its emotions will linger for quite some time ... (be careful while thumbing rides home!). Love, Margherita |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Dawn  please be careful |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
So strong the smack of this, that the sting remains in afterglow. Sensational and sharp rendering of a sobering strike. So courageous. Hugs and a standing ovation. TD |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
muted A delight to read. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Nice vent...Great title |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Come up for air sweets...I know Mouth to mouth..and mouth to other things...it will make ya breathe harder and feel better too.. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
No holds barred in this write...powerful. believe in what your heart feels... |
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bbent Senior Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 521Alaska |
I've learned never to mix love with common sense... Loved that line,great write. Live like it's your last day... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Reality check. Enjoyed the read, muted!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write...much enjoyed Dawn. Hugs~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow! Is that ever an intense powerful write. A totally frustrated poet. This is sooooo good "The only perfection I come close to is that of exact rage, whereas your liquid muse sinks deep into the places where your spine used to rest, consuming what's left of your waning dignity and foolish pride" Love ya lady and keep that spirit up because you're worth more than you even know! Hope you find that solace. Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Dawn, this has a familiar taste, one that is both bitter and sweet. The tone is one of strength and wisdom. And as for that TOE? LOL, all you can do is laugh at his poetic seriousness.  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Muted, I have little to say that hasn't been said. I enjoyed this outstanding write. Sadie |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
you guys have been terrific, thank you so much as for Toe, yep, he ALWAYS gets me to giggle  |
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