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Sunshine
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0 posted 2004-03-23 11:46 PM



The Inward Echo

Horses run so free and wild
Sacred as a storm

Feminine comes with loving wild
Yet holds within the norm

Circles need the weight of stone
To form the round complete

Feminine is one that hones
In change of story’s repeat

Though try as might, stone’s been laid
In highest arch, it seems

Willow bends upon what was said
To cover sleepy dreams

Thoughts so strong, repeat the day
And hears strong storms within

Heavy are the hearts that say
“All is well with all us men”

….

Yet, men ask those very women
When they are in deepest hold

“What say you, oh dearest one,”
And wait for words of gold

As woman still in breach of sins
Not hers, will answer as she can

“You shall be all that once has been”
As she eases thought of man.

He will not heed to words she says
But only think of one

And woman works against the storm
To keep the world as one.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (03-24-2004 10:40 AM).]

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Kahlil
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1 posted 2004-03-24 12:42 PM


weeping now, this has touched me so.  ~K~
iliana
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2 posted 2004-03-24 01:14 AM


Karilea, you know I get this one!  Fine write!  
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3 posted 2004-03-24 01:32 AM


Women are the nurturers they say,  and men still swing their clubs...good write


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4 posted 2004-03-24 02:12 AM


just speechless here...
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5 posted 2004-03-24 10:29 AM


um...yep...the tender, but yet the rock still....
yeppers, knew I'd love this one didn't ya!

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6 posted 2004-03-24 11:32 AM


"And woman works against the storm
To keep the world as one."

~ Yes, that is so often the way it is! ~ and I suppose we'll be the ones who will continue to have the babies!

A wonderful write!

Love & Light,
EA


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7 posted 2004-03-24 01:15 PM


"To keep the world as one"
no role in statement scripture
holy text ere defined the truth
of woman as Six words knowing heart sent

The world thanks you. And  wonder if the Oxford or Websters shall add that to their definition of womanhood this or the next year.

HOTY
Kj

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8 posted 2004-03-24 02:08 PM


WOW !
Love this!
hugs, Chris

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                                          Hans Christian Anderson

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9 posted 2004-03-24 02:39 PM


Oh this is marvelous Karilea, absolutely.. very touching.

it's a keeper.

M

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

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10 posted 2004-03-24 08:24 PM


Very interesting. I like it!
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11 posted 2004-03-25 04:12 PM


Sunshine,
   I wrote a lengthy response to this, but apparently didn't send it.  I thought I had.
Tremendous piece here!  Yes, I have the "wild" in me, actually it is probably the male influence that has given it to me, such as my grandfather,my mother who is an extension of my grandfather and some really good friends.  I don't think I would have had as much innately if it weren't for inner-weavings of male acquaintenances who think
differently than I.  Our brains have been pretty well proven to work differently-perhaps difference in chemical production.  I have to give credit to them for supporting the achievements I've had. Our differences ECHO, causing more to perceive and model.
   I do not work in the"business world" as per say.  Anyway, where I work, it is mostly women who run the show.  So, I guess I probably don't have the same view as most.

[This message has been edited by Sadelite (03-25-2004 09:38 PM).]

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