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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2004-03-20 11:45 PM



just another
lonely woman
just another
lonely night
just another
thing to say
just another
hold me tight

don't see pity in white walls
clean
so clean
"you just moved in?"
Tell her
that you meant it thus--
the way the shadows
stood
so tall
as if they were
still pumped
with pride
a purity
that cannot lie
he smiled nodding
as he dimmed
silences
of colors shout
smiling at the pain of it...

"We do the best we can," he said.
"Sometimes it's just not good enough."

Then he locked the door again.

Then he brought me home...

© Copyright 2004 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA
1 posted 2004-03-20 11:50 PM


I enjoyed this read my friend.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Spiros Zafiris
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since 2002-10-20
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Canada
2 posted 2004-03-21 02:29 AM


..serenity blaze../\..much enjoyed..


../\..Spiros


--------------calm----

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2004-03-21 03:45 AM


you do have a way of touching
DavePage
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4 posted 2004-03-21 04:52 AM


Intersting

I read it several times and I starting thinking about white walls and using lights and film to transform them into a vision of life

Dave

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
5 posted 2004-03-21 08:11 AM



Under bluest light
whiting shows
the truest write...

~*~

I'd ask you to quit being
so inspirational
but it looks good on you...

Blush
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since 2002-08-31
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Ky
6 posted 2004-03-21 08:14 AM


Nicely done hun
I enjoyed this read
I just posted a new one also
Hoping you do come see me
Hugs
Susan~

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
7 posted 2004-03-21 08:21 AM


serenity,
THe white walls contained the rainbow.  
He just didn't see it.

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
8 posted 2004-03-21 09:52 AM


"We do the best we can," he said.
"Sometimes it's just not good enough."

my ohhhhh my girl

Nightshade
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just out of reach
9 posted 2004-03-21 12:43 PM


Dang!!! hugs, Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
10 posted 2004-03-21 12:46 PM


Yer so darn good!
Love ya lady~

Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound
...or a smiling mouth.

         ~  Kahlil Gibran

Martie
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California
11 posted 2004-03-21 12:48 PM


serenity

Touched to tears from this.  

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
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Somewhere... out there...
12 posted 2004-03-21 01:01 PM



Karen?...

What Martie said...

Love you, lady...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
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Ohio
13 posted 2004-03-21 01:19 PM


may i bow?
you nailed this......

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
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14 posted 2004-03-21 03:36 PM


You're so darn Gorgeous, humph!

rem what I told you? don't wait too long

M

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
15 posted 2004-03-21 07:09 PM


this needs...a bump
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
16 posted 2004-03-21 10:34 PM


Serenity~  You tell it so good,
with so much style and no frills.

To me, that's the best part!!!

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