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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2004-03-19 09:56 PM



~*~

Where the river crosses these days
is a long way off
but I still go there now and then
and take a walk along the edge.

Thinking about the way it used to be
once upon a time
before we parceled out our dreams
that sold for cheap back then.

When I go there I don't stay for long
I just watch the water running over rapids
skipping a few stones
and think about where I'm gonna head out next.

'Cause the way I see it
it's not much use trying to keep up
when you're closing in on the end
but it don't matter much to me the way it used to.

I'm just happy to have made my peace
cause that's something I can take with me
Lord knows I can't keep trying to rope in a promise
that I have no business messing with.

So I reckon I'll switch back
before the sun goes down on me
maybe tie my heart to a tumbleweed
and let it go.

~*~

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Enchantress
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Canada eh.
1 posted 2004-03-19 10:06 PM


"So I reckon I'll switch back
before the sun goes down on me
maybe tie my heart to a tumbleweed
and let it go."

Oooh myyy lady Lori, lookie this!
I love it...wonderful write.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound
...or a smiling mouth.

         ~  Kahlil Gibran

Duncan
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2 posted 2004-03-19 10:07 PM


"'Cause the way I see it
it's not much use trying to keep up
when you're closing in on the end
but it don't matter much to me the way it used to."

"So I reckon I'll switch back
before the sun goes down on me
maybe tie my heart to a tumbleweed
and let it go."

I like this "voice" of yours Bluesy!!  You only write in it now and then, but I've enjoyed it each time.  Wasn't it Charlotte once??
Wouldn't mind reading this style from you more often...  
Okay...It was Clementine, I was close.  

[This message has been edited by Duncan (03-19-2004 11:36 PM).]

aujussy wolf
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3 posted 2004-03-19 10:08 PM


superb write, i like your point of view , thanks for sharing
inkedgoddess
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4 posted 2004-03-19 10:29 PM


drink up at the riverbed and renew again..yes i love this way of yours
so glad you are here girlie

Honeybunch
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5 posted 2004-03-19 10:58 PM


Lovely, Bluesy, and a bit of advice there for most I reckon.
Martie
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6 posted 2004-03-19 11:23 PM


Lori

"So I reckon I'll switch back
before the sun goes down on me
maybe tie my heart to a tumbleweed
and let it go."

I've always been fond of tumbleweeds...now I know why.  Thanks.

ThisDiamond
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7 posted 2004-03-19 11:44 PM


What a great little presentation of just the right spice for your poem...
Tied to a tumbleweed...

You make me smile.
TD

passing shadows
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8 posted 2004-03-20 04:47 AM


*sigh*
ice
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9 posted 2004-03-20 06:52 AM


Lori
Poems like these are mysterious,
and that is a good thing..
In them there are secrets
enticingly, nearly revealed.
What becomes visible
Is the aura of melancholy feelings,
Using a river to float the theme is perfect  
enjoyed
_________ice
  ><>

Kicking Kim
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10 posted 2004-03-20 07:01 AM


^*-*^*-*^*-*^*-*^*-*^

"maybe tie my heart to a tumbleweed
and let it go"

What wonderful imagery.  If only we could do this in reality and our wandering hearts could meet up with our souls for a moonlight dance.

Lovely!  

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
11 posted 2004-03-20 02:14 PM


Nancy~  Thank you kindly, your warm smiles are much appreciated.

Duncan~  I think you have me confused with someone else,
that would be "Clementine"     
Thank you for being here and putting up with my voice.  

Hey aujussy~ thanks for your nice reply, you flatter me.

Michele~  Renewal, yes that's it!  thank you girlie~

Helen~  So happy you stopped by to read, thank you always.

Martie~ It's been a long time coming, and so worth the stumbling.
You know what I mean.  Hugs you~

TD~  Oh thanks, that's a nice compliment, smiling back at you Kathleen~  

Hi ice~   I suppose the river has a double meaning, as it continues
on in spite of the elements.  Thank you so much for reading me.

Dixie~  Ah come on, take a walk with me, and smile sweetie.

Kim~  Nice to have you here, and thank you for the moon dance image.
Hmmm, I'm liking that.

Janet Marie
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12 posted 2004-03-20 03:27 PM


it's not much use trying to keep up
when you're closing in on the end
============================

maybe tie my heart to a tumbleweed
and let it go.
===========================

Lori, this is delightful, you should definately develop this poetic voice and character...do a series like the Capts Iambe...me thinks you have a knack for it.
cool poem girlie.

Home is a feeling I buried in you ...
I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ...

M.E.

DavePage
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13 posted 2004-03-20 03:54 PM


I really like this

Direct and really good

dave

Duncan
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14 posted 2004-03-20 04:13 PM


I told her that too JM, she's being contrary...  
Kahlil
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15 posted 2004-03-20 10:15 PM


This is delightfully written...we want more, dang it!  Love the peace, acceptance, wisdom, and the flow of it.  ~K~
iliana
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16 posted 2004-03-20 10:28 PM


Lori -- enjoyed your viewpoint!  This brought a memory back to me of Joan Baez' Tumbleweed.  Do you remember that song?  I loved it, though it was somewhat sadder.   ........jo
jwesley
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17 posted 2004-03-21 01:39 AM


every once in a while you pop up with something far better the good, with something extraordinary . . . this is one of those times and I'm proud to have seen it!

jwesley

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
18 posted 2004-03-21 06:39 PM


Hi JM~  That's a mighty fine reply and I thank you kindly for stopping by.
You're sweet!

Thanks Dave~  Much obliged!

Dunc~  That's not true, it's just that I don't get into my cowgirl heart mode very often.  

Kahlil~  Always a pleasure to hear from you ma'am.  Thanks

iliana~  That song hit a nerve~
"Once I pulled all my roots free
I became a slave to the wind,
a slave to the wind."
It's so true, it's easier once we learn to just go with it.  
Thanks, you~

jwesley~  How kind of you to say so, you humble me in the nicest way.  
Thank you very much.

suthern
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19 posted 2004-03-22 10:30 AM


This is Bluesy at her best... *S* I like this so much... especially the ending! *S*
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