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Thesauric Tendencies

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Janet Marie
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0 posted 03-19-2004 12:10 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

Thesauric Tendencies


These words will fail me,

for how could words alone
speak of this
illicit longing?

Pen stroke caresses on pages in
blinding absence of fingers begging
to trace your braille confessions.
Can parchment hold this much
definitive ache curling the edges?

If words but could, they would burn slow
down margins seasoned with your scent,
as I script your name in cursive filigree on
my skin, inhaling you before the ink dries.
My lips recite you, vocabulary exchanged
for body language in intimate explanation.

Knowing I would be rhapsodized in your rhyme,
redefined in the heat of your articulate rhythms.
Breathless pronunciations decipher graffiti thrusts,
leaving indelible stains on manuscripts of lust.


If words but could, they would never be enough.

Still, I have memorized you chapter and verse
plagiarized you in chains of museless curse,
idolized you on metaphorical knees of coerce.


As if such carnal explicitness could be done justice.

Seduction's spell in syllabic diction, if words
but could they would shed this shell of fiction.


Might I find the words that will not fail me
© Copyright 2004 Janet Marie - All Rights Reserved
Duncan
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1 posted 03-19-2004 12:16 AM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

"If words but could, they would burn slow
down margins seasoned with your scent,
as I script your name in cursive filigree on
my skin, inhaling you before the ink dries.
My lips recite you, vocabulary exchanged
for body language in intimate explanation."

Ahhh, think you could hook us up with an audio of this one JM?  For those lonely ol' nights...  
ethome
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2 posted 03-19-2004 12:20 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

You little devil you....Snuck one in late at night.

I just can't believe how beautifully clever this is.
You've come a long long way my poet pet.

The words choices in this are excellent and the poetic metaphoric reference from imagination to image are superb...
"as I script your name in cursive filigree on
my skin, inhaling you before the ink dries"

and oh, I love this bit!

"Knowing I would be rhapsodized in your rhyme,
redefined in the heat of your articulate rhythms.
Breathless pronunciations decipher graffiti thrusts,
leaving indelible stains on manuscripts of lust"

Man, that makes the title come alive.....

You da poet baby write write on on!

Love to ya kid!

Eric

Remember this...

Grab your pen
from the stars
call your muse from afar
steal some time
where you are
and write poetry.

Write sweet sounds
like the breeze
and you'll laugh
while you're free
long or short verses please
write some poetry.

At your desk on the net
with your keys ready set
sing the songs you like best
while you're blessed
by the best
you can be.

From your quill
from your heart
write the words that you are
turn hatred to trust
break your arm if you must
share your tears only just
write some poetry.

You'll grow till you bloom
like a harvest full moon
shining truth in a room
and I can tell
that you're well
writing poetry.

You got taste
you got spunk
you got words
for everyone.
In a dream or in truth
full of love or just blue
any way that you choose
write some poetry.
Eric True


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3 posted 03-19-2004 01:07 AM       View Profile for muted   Email muted   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for muted

"If words but could, they would never be enough."

i chose that line because i cant compliment this poem enough...you have amazed me, and touched me...
Midnitesun
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"as I script your name in cursive filigree on
my skin, inhaling you before the ink dries."

damn, but you are good, lady
can I sit near you for a while and absorb some of your poetic talent?

of course, this goes into my library
to inhale
Kahlil
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JM, this is incredible artistry!  I'm in awe.

I like this:
"Still, I have memorized you chapter and verse
plagiarized you in chains of museless curse,
idolized you on metaphorical knees of coerce."

~K~
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6 posted 03-19-2004 02:47 AM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

Gee, Janet, I'm too novice to even lend a response to this beauty so I'll take liberty to borrow some of yours...

          These words will fail me,
          for how could words alone
          speak  

serenity blaze
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7 posted 03-19-2004 04:43 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

The heartbreak begins right here:

"These words will fail me,"

and then you start that "hurts so good" tenderness and it's so personal--sometimes I read you and it's like hearing my cellmate whisper prayers in the night as we both weep.

And this right here so defines that intimacy, as it aptly displays your willingness to allow us a peek into your own journaling.

"Pen stroke caresses on pages in
blinding absence of fingers begging
to trace your braille confessions."

wow.

and then ladies and gents? She makes love to us all:

"If words but could, they would burn slow
down margins seasoned with your scent,
as I script your name in cursive filigree on
my skin, inhaling you before the ink dries.
My lips recite you, vocabulary exchanged
for body language in intimate explanation."

M'lady Jan? The frustration, even through devotion, is all lit up plainly for us  in the italicized emphasis:

"If words but could, they would never be enough."

"As if such carnal explicitness could be done justice."

To your ending prayer:

"Might I find the words that will not fail me"


Mind if I wing around YOUR flame awhile?



Total devastating beauty Jan.

The moth becomes the flame.



thank you
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if words but could they would

The Queen Moth flies...
and lights candle sticks...

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9 posted 03-19-2004 08:04 AM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Greeneyes

I will be back! just wanted to let you know I was here

~~**~~
Walking with bare feet
among a tapestry of words,
each woven thread, awakening the soul
~~**~~

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-19-2004 09:14 AM).]

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10 posted 03-19-2004 08:56 AM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

"Still, I have memorized you chapter and verse
plagiarized you in chains of museless curse,
idolized you on metaphorical knees of coerce.

As if such carnal explicitness could be done justice.

Seduction's spell in syllabic diction, if words
but could they would shed this shell of fiction.

Might I find the words that will not fail me"


Janet Marie...words fail me now...
as always you leave me speechless with your writing.
If only you would post more often...pleeease.
Excellent write.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound
...or a smiling mouth.

         ~  Kahlil Gibran

Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 03-19-2004 09:05 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

JM,
You have the mind of an artist
And the soul of a saint
And the read of your words
Have brought me to faint.

I very rarely save poems, but this I will save. WWRS
Martie
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Janet Marie

I think your muse has been saving up for this glorious birthing.  It's wonderful wording leaves me in awe of your talent and your passionate heart.  
Opeth
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13 posted 03-19-2004 10:32 AM       View Profile for Opeth   Email Opeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Opeth

Bravo! Very well done and most entertaining to read. This was my favorite part...

If words but could, they would burn slow
down margins seasoned with your scent,
as I script your name in cursive filigree on
my skin, inhaling you before the ink dries.
My lips recite you, vocabulary exchanged
for body language in intimate explanation.

I absolutely loved that segment.

"You sleep in the night yet the night and the silent water still so dark."

ice
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Janet M
enjoyed muchly...excelent language...
______ice
  ><>
Janet Marie
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15 posted 03-19-2004 06:47 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Duncan ... me thinks me mothy missouri twang might kill the mood ... maybe I can find a blonde to read it for you.

Eric ... my poet pal, you are so good to me...thank you so much for your generosity and encouragement..and for the repost of a lovely gift...I still have that printed out from before.
You da man

Dawn...what a wonderful response...your words "but" did. thank you so very much.

Kacy...I'll make ya a deal....I'll come sit by you and we'll watch those northern lights
thank you for this sweet reply and I am honored to be in your library. thanks girlie.

Kahlil ... thank you for such a gracious reply... I am so pleased you stopped by.


~~~~~

thank you guys..very much.

Home is a feeling I buried in you ...
I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ...

M.E.

Janet Marie
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Sadelite ... your response was just perfect... thank you very much for reading me.  

KA ...  me twin ya read me inside out and in between ... thank you seems too little to say for such a heartfelt generous offering....your reply reads like poetry.
*sigh* nothing like being well inspired.  
Its the living with out it thats the real test.
(ykikyk) thank you baby-girl...love you.


Kari... me thinks I singed meself on this one.. *L* burned those candles a both ends  
thank you  

~~~~~

thank you all!!!

Home is a feeling I buried in you ...
I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ...

M.E.
Janet Marie
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Lauren... I look forward to your flutterbye  

Nancy... thank you so much for your kind words...seems my muse got spring fever...funny how it works..for months nothing and now she wont shut up. *L*
thank you for your support.

Sy-babes... *smile* ... you and Randy feeling faint? got the vapors?? lol
thank you my dearheart...I am honored to be "kept by you"

Martie... isnt that the truth...long pregnancy and long labors...lol but if feels liberating to be writing again... thank you so much sweets...

~~~

thank you~~~

Home is a feeling I buried in you ...
I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ...

M.E.

Janet Marie
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Opeth... thank you ..that was one of my faves too...thank you for stopping by and sharing your thoughts.

Ice ... thank you too for coming by and for the excellent. I appreciate the read.

~~~~~~~~

thank  you to everyone on this thread for these delightful replies...youre so good for me mothymuse.

Home is a feeling I buried in you ...
I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ...

M.E.

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Knowing I would be rhapsodized in your rhyme,
redefined in the heat of your articulate rhythms.
Breathless pronunciations decipher graffiti thrusts,
leaving indelible stains on manuscripts of lust.

You and your muse are breathtaking, your talent is unsurpassed Janet Marie. I forgot how much I missed the rainbow of ribbons wrapped around your poetry.  This is a many splendored thing, and a very special gift.  Thank you for writing the way you do.  Keep it up would you!!         

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20 posted 03-19-2004 09:54 PM       View Profile for sea_of_okc   Email sea_of_okc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sea_of_okc

Wow JM, all those times I thought your muse was off hiding she must have been studying

Word choice was superb, the inferences clear and it all flows smoothly.
Amazing poem m'dear.
All I can say is I stand in awe...
Janet Marie
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21 posted 03-20-2004 12:27 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Lori ... thank you so much girlie, for such a lovely reply on this and on the duet Lauren and I did...both comments are gracious and kind...just like you.   

Steve... I bought the muse a thesaurus and she took off? who knew?
thank you groovy guy for your kind words and for stopping by.


thank you both...you humble me with such supportive replies. I've posted so little in the last year that I feel like a newbie, I get so nervous, moth stage fright.
thanks guys.

Home is a feeling I buried in you ...
I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ...

M.E.

Nan
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I'm smiling... These words certainly haven't failed you, m'friend - Nicely penned...
Kit McCallum
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"Still, I have memorized you chapter and verse
plagiarized you in chains of museless curse,
idolized you on metaphorical knees of coerce."

What a treat JM!  First a beautiful collaboration with Lauren, and then I find this treasure to read this morning. Feels like old times - sooooo wonderful to read you.

This was stunning Janet Marie. The vocabulary and metaphorical twists were a sheer delight. Can a poem tickle the mind gator-gal?  'Cause this one just did.

Absolutely wonderful!

Best wishes and big hugs for a great morning read,
/Kit
Janet Marie
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Nan ... A smile and well done from someone who writes as well as you means much to me..thank you kindly, kind lady, for reading  

Kitgatorgirlie   me thinks I was trying to tickle something!! LOL
thank you dear one...for your constant support and encouragement of my work.
I always smile when I see your name.
thank you both and to all who shared their thoughts with me. It had been over 8 months since I'd posted anything...feels good to be writing again. We'll see how long the muse sticks around...I've found shes best left to come and go as needed.

Home is a feeling I buried in you ...
I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ...

M.E.

 
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