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Outline from much old darker days
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Outline from much old darker days |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Pretty wild, badly written, pure emotion tilting at windmills dave ***************************************** I look at you and I fear you You took my life You took my breath You took my mother Your dark staring outlines took my youth They preserve you They deserve you In their careful pinnies Their words of sense Die my son But don’t complain Loose everything you hold dear But be a man Now I look at a monument I look at old broken people Everything gone If only it was worth it If only it was worth it Now an outcast I return To what |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"pinnies" - pinafores? It's good to post "the old stuff"... at least we know we were thinking then, too... |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
We dont stop Sunshine A blessing or a curse I still feel the same A guy called Kenny Everette said I have got honest and wiser Now I wouldn't tell you Dave |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
You tilt at windmills with passion. Well done. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Good work, Dave!  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
incredible write David, but if we look upon the beauty of time, we may not fear, but more so...remember those influencial tones which made us who we are...everything is so very necessary... Hugs...Lee J. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Scorpio and Grover Many Thanks for your comments Lee J Yes I understand what you mean. I remember overnight stars that took 40 years to become one - not suggesting, by the way I am. Early work is almost embarrasing but often when you look below the surface better than the more polished because it was so real and you were struggling. Thanks everyone Dave |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dang!! This is SO good Dave! Keep posting that old stuff...it never goes stale. Hugs YOU! Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Old pains past leave old scars. |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Hey Dave , I enjoyed reading this ....I think we all have good and bad memories , thats what makes us what we are today . I cringe when I view my old poetry , but yes they are all part of me ... Hope By the way where is cirencester ? I am originally from Lancashire |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Enchantress Thanks - I think I destroyed most during that time. It is preserved on jobserve but even now I cring at the idea of getting back stuff I wrote. It was written with a wide open mind and I mean wide open icebox Yes they do icebox but the trick I suppose is to get the scars to heal and then disapear - I haven't really changed that much - left home at 16 and joined the Navy - bad eyes meant non-combatent although I always volunteered for anything if I could. HopeS Thanks Hope You are right Cirencester is down between Cheltenham and Swindon - old Roman town I was born in Shepherd's Bush in London - my usual joke is the Shepherd seems to have something wrong - everyone else was born in the house thanks for all your comments Dave |
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