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Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

0 posted 2004-03-17 03:28 PM

After Red Tide

Foam trails meander along the edge,
the murmur of uncountable bubbles
sultry behind a fading cush of waves
as each tiny existence flicks out
in drops too small to find,
and a whisper of salt, quiet as
the endless touchings of the sand.
They whisper that the world is good,
pretend the bubble of my spirit
has a place within the surge
and tumble of the universe;
it is such a beautiful lie
that for a moment, this lifetime
at least and maybe more, I believe.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-03-17 03:35 PM

You've done it again. You've managed
to make me homesick...

but it's something that had to be said,
and I'm glad you found time, and occasion,
to treat us so.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2004-03-17 03:36 PM

Ed...I feel a great deal of reflection in this poem with a sad undertone. Sometimes I feel so small...like the sand, the salt you speak of ...when compared to the enormous world. You are special, my friend..never doubt it! I see you there on the beach!

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

3 posted 2004-03-17 03:42 PM

They whisper that the world is good,
pretend the bubble of my spirit
has a place within the surge
and tumble of the universe;
it is such a beautiful lie
that for a moment, this lifetime
at least and maybe more, I believe.

yes those moments of clarity here and there
i belive i have them too

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

4 posted 2004-03-17 03:56 PM

Excellent!

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2004-03-17 04:09 PM

excellent...and I love the limit of these lines:

"it is such a beautiful lie
that for a moment, this lifetime
at least and maybe more, I believe."

...and, well worth believing...I say...

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

6 posted 2004-03-17 06:18 PM

so lovely

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2004-03-17 11:01 PM

I never could resist a beautiful lie!

Ed, you are something else, and this is very special!

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

8 posted 2004-03-19 03:11 PM

They whisper that the world is good,
pretend the bubble of my spirit
has a place within the surge
and tumble of the universe;

Wow, RatL., you did it again! You've been peeping again. Take care. Oh, BTW, excellent poem! For a person who once responded to one of my poems that it was difficult to translate shades into words,
I find you do an incredible job!

Sadie

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

9 posted 2004-03-19 04:22 PM

Luxury of good words

Dave

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

10 posted 2004-03-20 05:26 PM

I'm glad the rumors I read of your leaving the site were only that. Your poetry leaves a depth to these pages that would indeed be missed

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

11 posted 2004-03-20 10:52 PM

I believe! Really enjoyed this one, RL!

.....jo

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

12 posted 2004-03-21 02:42 PM

Great write!

Eric

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

13 posted 2004-03-22 03:49 AM

nice write Ed

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

14 posted 2004-03-22 10:54 AM

No one... but NO ONE... can match your ability to paint such images with your pen that we don't just see through your eyes... we are there.... appreciating the most minute particles of the vastness. *S*

They whisper that the world is good,
pretend the bubble of my spirit
has a place within the surge
and tumble of the universe;

What isn't a lie is that this world is better because of you... and you have a place within the conclave of the finest talents to ever pick up a pen. *S*

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite

since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

15 posted 2004-03-28 09:58 AM

.

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

16 posted 2004-03-28 02:29 PM

enjoyed

bringsup memories when i lived next to ocean i really miss it thanks

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

17 posted 2004-03-28 05:50 PM

Ed~
You just get betterer and betterer and betterer~
Honest Injun~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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