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After D' Rain
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After D' Rain |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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After d’ Rain ©2004 C.G. Ward crippled silence with a chilling contempt for peace. so you chased sex as a prayer while I turned to the religion of a workaholic… - and we all know how devout a convert can be. the waterfalls fell, dry as the humor that used to make you smile: like the time in Tioga – you cried for the beauty of a gnat in the eye, while we teetered at the edge of our world - ten by twelve paces on a good day; the size of our small living room which was never really lived in. silence again. see, love was never meant to be blind, …we just saw it that way. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
this really aches  youve touched bone here  |
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WildPoet Member
since 2003-11-10
Posts 205California |
This works. I can feel it. WildPoet  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Melancholic, but beautifully written. Love, Margherita |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
so you chased sex as a prayer while I turned to the religion of a workaholic… - and we all know how devout a convert can be. ^ loved it...great lines and this: while we teetered at the edge of our world - ten by twelve paces on a good day; the size of our small living room which was never really lived in. really enjoyed the read M |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"love was never meant to be blind, …we just saw it that way." hmmmmmm...those two lines jumped out at me today.. Wonderfully written and deeply moving.  "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
"so you chased sex as a prayer while I turned to the religion of a workaholic… - and we all know how devout a convert can be." THis must hit home for many. Great mataphors. I read you to learn. Thank you, prof. Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Christopher Enjoyed the read. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
there is a deep aches to this.....amazing Christopher....really...  ~~**~~ |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Awesome Christopher. You have a brilliant way of expressing emotion. Enjoyed. Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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PassionatelyRomantic Member
since 2004-01-24
Posts 190 |
great write ! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Chris, you have a way of saying so easily the words that express some very hard and raw emotions, and you do it so well. When I see sister Lizzy saying she learns from you, that is a lesson in itself for people to read and learn. psst you look great in a tux! |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
How you put the last two lines was very emotional!! I love the way this is just packed full of emotion. GREAT ONE!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Well well Christopher, love this piece from you, the phrases, the format...especially these lines.... so you chased sex as a prayer the waterfalls fell, dry as the humor that used to make you smile: you cried for the beauty of a gnat in the eye, Such vivid imagery. Thankyou M Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Penned with a master's hand. Excellent! |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
It was really nice. Lot of thought. It was really a thinker. Juju |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Ah ha! Now I get it! Geeez Christopher, you sure know how to work your words. What a ride, this time around!!! Says a lot for the price of admission. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
this is a great write... i liked various things in parts and also the sum of all the parts... just wondering a touch about the italics ... why you felt that it was necessary to do so... just so I could understand better... regards sudhir |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
After d'rain and after d'snow comes d'spring don'tcha know And when it comes then we will see Chris writing more of d'poems to read Rhyme he won't rhythm he can he's C of PIP d'poetry man. Someone medicate me...please.  |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
hey, thanks all... as always, your comments are appreciated (even if they rhyme - rolf D) C |
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