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Only a Dream
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Only a Dream |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Only a Dream A fast forward Mutation change Flush to midnight onto page The earth melting with me A curve that undulates A snake a river Connected at the nape The mind like skin The shrinking flesh within And a thought transfers on waves The mouth no longer words no stage Connected at the nape A drape is on our privacy And the breeze is breath The song a cloud Dizzy crazy up side down I am the dirt the dirt is me Run me through your fingers clean And know my way Is fast forward mutate change Kiss of ocean pull of tide The dream fast forwards and I ride Eyes close the crazy down I’m drowning in my own nightgown |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Excellent, as usual!  |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - dreams are always full of images and your poetry paints those images so well - Paul |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie A delight to read.  |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Holy Toledo!! Your words amaze me still Martie. hugs, Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What were you doing in my dream? You forgot to  Well done, Sissie... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful dear Martie... Wonderful write. Hugs~ Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Kiss of ocean pull of tide The dream fast forwards and I ride Eyes close the crazy down I’m drowning in my own nightgown" Loved this last verse, and wonderful motion throughout the piece, Martie!  |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
WOW |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Very good wording here Martie....a real fine poem... Thank you... Goldenrose. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
It seems that all dreams are rooted in earthly reality (literally)....these lines tell me that this dream is no exception.. "I am the dirt the dirt is me Run me through your fingers clean And know my way Is fast forward mutate change" A fine poem, Martie...enjoyed reading it _______ice ><> |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartiSis~ We all should possess the creative originality of your poetic voice~ Oh yeah ... we should be so lucky ! WOWSER ! Love you lady~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oh what you do with words and nightgowns.  I am sure of my reasons, embracing the seasons, |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Whew -- quite a ride! You do have a flair for finding the dramatic, and pulling us right along. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Wow! Each time I read this I get out of breath! *laugh* Thanks for the ride. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
whoa Martie....Love the ending... Kiss of ocean pull of tide The dream fast forwards and I ride Eyes close the crazy down I’m drowning in my own nightgown The imagery is wild fantastic.M Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Only a dream-- Therefore treasure it, good or bad; that's as close to real as it may ever come. As for me, I'll gladly pull your sled back to the top of the hill if I can ride with you again! |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hi Martie...wow! The imagery in this piece just made my mouth drop open. Well dodne dear friend. I love it. Only a dream? Seems so real, vivid to be a dream. One must wonder...Are dreams reality...or reality just a dream? Really do love this dear friend. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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