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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2004-03-14 06:16 PM



Separation Anxiety


Feelings fade when time
is out of place and touch
has become a hollow verse.

When eyes hide behind,
their squint a distance look,
as the dark circles under
join the sanctuary
of those sleepless nights.

I look for it, though a needle
in a haystack, or a meeting of the minds,
a place to belong, to feel wanted,
not just a charm to dangle on a link.

I don't search, for I have found the second path,
though undisciplined, with muted colors
leading me on, enough reality
to kiss my thoughts, but needlessly
unlabeled.

I feel this in my heart,
sometimes swallowing my pride,
as I watch the flames rise
and the warmth flow...
on this, the other side.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2004-03-14 06:22 PM


Always two sides, huh M?
Excellent write.
TD

Grover
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2 posted 2004-03-14 07:47 PM


Enjoyed.
passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2004-03-14 07:57 PM


there is a time for everything


Goodknight
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4 posted 2004-03-14 07:58 PM


great poem here - so well done - Paul
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just out of reach
5 posted 2004-03-14 09:07 PM


Awesome writing of true feelings as usual Maureen. hugs, Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

iliana
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6 posted 2004-03-15 12:46 PM


M -- W O W ! ! !  Totally awesome poem!   .......jo

"I don't search, for I have found the second path,
though undisciplined, with muted colors
leading me on, enough reality
to kiss my thoughts, but needlessly
unlabeled."

I identify with this verse.

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7 posted 2004-03-15 12:57 PM


you know mmoonchild, muted is a nice shade sometimes...never loud, never washed out...but subtle..classy...and youve always been a classy lady even through all the sadness



you wear you words well

Goldenrose
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8 posted 2004-03-15 04:46 AM


Your inner feelings are displayed perfectly M....we see your mind....without pretence....

Thank you...

Goldenrose.

''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity''

DavePage
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9 posted 2004-03-15 06:02 AM


Yes I really liked this - soft, muted, undersung, meaningfull, quite potent.

Lovely

Dave

All I wanted was some joy
Not attached to the wrist
Like some old jangling toy

BluesSerenade
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10 posted 2004-03-17 11:39 PM



Loved every word of this,  and your title too.

Nicely said and done Maur~

Opeth
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11 posted 2004-03-18 07:25 AM


"I look for it, though a needle
in a haystack, or a meeting of the minds,
a place to belong, to feel wanted,
not just a charm to dangle on a link."


I especially enjoyed this verse because I can personally relate to it. Enjoyed!

"You sleep in the night yet the night and the silent water still so dark."

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Deep in the heart
12 posted 2004-03-18 09:22 AM


Oh, Maureen ... I'm glad I'm on this side reading your work

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Janet Marie
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13 posted 2004-03-19 08:29 AM


I don't search, for I have found the second path,
though undisciplined, with muted colors
leading me on, enough reality
to kiss my thoughts, but needlessly
unlabeled.

I feel this in my heart,
sometimes swallowing my pride,
as I watch the flames rise
and the warmth flow...
on this, the other side.
===========================


and then you turn it into lovely poetry...
and this is....indeed.

Home is a feeling I buried in you ...
I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ...

M.E.

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