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Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2004-03-13 12:22 PM

silent highways dangle before eyes to blurry to see

white line death
impassable passes
borders with barbs
and the night howls

flickering arrows
left turns when there are
no right-ways
straight shouldn't be jagged
daggers
and the desert cries

signs of desperation
directions from watchful
wrens
stories etched on mountains
fables
and the sun mocks

and the line keeps going
while the stars cling to hope
but the one who lassos the moon
wins
and while i once believed,
i now swing from the end of my own rope
with only a dull knife
at my side

©snow

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

1 posted 2004-03-13 12:58 PM

Woohoo Snow. Love it. Oh yes, oh yes, oh yes. Man this just speaks right to me and through me. I know this so well. And the ending...pure genius. You have a winner here my friend.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

2 posted 2004-03-13 01:18 AM

well kevin i don't know about it being a winner, but i do know i was a wee bit angry when i wrote it ... your opinion means a great deal to me. thank you!!
~hugs~

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-03-13 05:30 AM

you don't show anger in the expected way...this is more indirect...good piece

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

4 posted 2004-03-13 10:35 AM

and the line keeps going
while the stars cling to hope
but the one who lassos the moon
wins

love this line snow , good to see you posting again ....
this too shall pass

-Wolf

Edder
Senior Member

since 2003-04-02

Posts 671

5 posted 2004-03-13 12:14 PM

tis better to write it than to harbor it... and you write it sooo well.

WildPoet
Member

since 2003-11-10

Posts 205
California

6 posted 2004-03-16 03:59 AM

Very nice!

WildPoet

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

7 posted 2004-03-16 04:04 AM

Nicely done!

Eric

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

8 posted 2004-03-16 04:37 AM

"flickering arrows
left turns when there are
no right-ways
straight shouldn't be jagged
daggers
and the desert cries"

hmm, i know this feeling too well..thank you for writing it, making it tangible

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

9 posted 2004-03-16 11:22 AM

there's no way for me to say just how much
your comments have touched me on this piece.. thank you, very much!!!
snow

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

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