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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2004-03-08 11:12 PM

Clouds dip into
waves tapping on
heaven's door,

like waterfalls
they rise,

this is the point
where the sea and sky collide

the window fills with miles
for the yellowbird up high,

she does fly!!

this is the point
where the sea and sky collide

shatter the barricades
walls growing wings
the clock lost its chime,

this is the point
where sea and sky collide

this inverted world
on a whirling niteride,

i can freefall here

a motherless child,

a shattered mirror

messed up and beautiful

without defining lines

ilusion and reality
side by side

absurdity,
a revelation
of clarity

in such place,
i can thrive

there is room for me here

let the spirits
be my guide

at this point
where the sea and sky collide

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (03-09-2004 12:15 PM).]

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2004-03-09 12:02 PM

hoping all is ok Mish
enjoyed this line:

"this is the point
where the sea and sky collide"

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2004-03-09 12:11 PM

"walls growing wings"

YES. I love that image. They can and they do, but it takes a wise person to notice.

And funny, I don't see a bit of angst to worry for the collision. It's like the birth of all creation in my mind.

It's wonderful to read you again, m'friend.

(Hope you've been well and happy.)

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2004-03-09 12:26 PM

Very nicely done
"at this point
where the sea and sky collide"
They always do with an eternity of meaning.......Good work!

Eric

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

4 posted 2004-03-09 01:21 AM

"without defining lines

ilusion and reality
side by side

absurdity is
a revelation of clarity

in such place,
i can thrive

there is room for me here

at this point
where the sea and sky collide "
-------------------------------
and she does fly high and strong

and i enjoy watching her expanding her wings

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

5 posted 2004-03-09 01:27 AM

"absurdity is
a revelation of clarity

in such place,
i can thrive

there is room for me here"

Inkedgoddess -- I hope there is room for me there, too!

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2004-03-09 10:34 AM

this is the point
where sea and sky collide

this inverted world
on a whirling niteride,

i can freefall here
Michele, me too......

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2004-03-09 10:45 AM

"messed up and beautiful" ~ I doubt that you are all that messed up because you certainly can write beautiful poetry!

Love & Light,
EA

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

8 posted 2004-03-09 10:51 AM

the window fills with miles
for the yellowbird up high,

she does fly!!

... and I breathe.

Beautiful!

Love, Margherita

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

9 posted 2004-03-09 12:17 PM

Yes, Yes!!

all is well
up in the air from nj to florida
seeing the world upside down, or was it righside up? whichever, there was a place for me there....

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

10 posted 2004-03-09 12:49 PM

yes, I think I found a place for me there too

a beautiful write

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

11 posted 2004-03-09 04:46 PM

one cool write...I hesitate to clip just one section, but this one did stand out:

"absurdity,
a revelation
of clarity"

what a great job you've done on this one!

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

12 posted 2004-03-09 04:57 PM

Very good! Grover.

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

13 posted 2004-03-09 07:34 PM

I think I can thrive in the same place myself. Liked this one

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

14 posted 2004-03-09 07:38 PM

enjoyed

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

15 posted 2004-03-09 10:18 PM

Very nice..:-)
I like the way the reader is kept on course by the repetitive line....
"where the sea and sky collide"
In a longer poem with short lines, I sometimes get thrown off course, not so in this one, the message never got lost, and a well written message it is.
enjoyed
________ice
><>

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

16 posted 2004-03-09 10:28 PM

Is there room for two
on that cliff edge,
where we witness sea and sky collide,
free-falling into the abyss
all is bliss, all is bliss

~P

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

17 posted 2004-03-09 10:52 PM

thanks for reading
and come with me
to where the sea meets the sky
and leave all confinement behind

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