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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Sharpening Birds dance in pairs along the yardwall like words, couplets sooner for the dancing. Do I hold this penknife like a fool’s sword thinking to slice the melon of infinity, Or have I honed its edge so sharp merely to whittle at a yellow painted stick? A pencil of tree sound marks my tableau. Every tree writes sound, an age-long line of it. These sycamore eggs warming on the ground say more of me than anything I might compose. A gardener would have swept them up, but I have no gardener, nor any garden. Still the tree writes for me, eggs will hatch into trees or birds, and dance a while. Will you dance with me along the yardwall? Shall we then drop, singing, into the grass? |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
As usual-- best of the best! Grover. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Will you dance with me along the yardwall? Shall we then drop, singing, into the grass?" Wonderful...so much enjoyed the read! Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Ed - you do it so very well - I loved the sense of this - paul |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed "Will you dance with me along the yardwall? Shall we then drop, singing, into the grass?" What a sweet question and a wonderful poem! It is so good to see you posting again!  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Smiles abound. I loved your metaphors. Great job as always. You are so creative... It's great to have you back! Your work was missed! Sadie |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ed, a real big W O W to this one -- I really, really liked it. It has a feel of the eternal about it, somehow. ......jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good to see you |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is absolutely magnificent, my friend. *S* The closing lines epitomize beauty... the entire poem is one to enjoy again and again. That sharp edge whittled words with perfection. *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Do I hold this penknife like a fool’s sword thinking to slice the melon of infinity," ~ You are so clever and conceptually creative in your writing. You paint such memorable visuals!  En garde! Love & Light, EA |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
thought-provoking write...well done...nicely fit together...loved it |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Sharp visions! Beautiful. Love, Margherita |
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