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toward the battered lighthouse - scene5

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Dark Angel
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0 posted 03-08-2004 05:08 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Angel

walking straight is a novelty
well at least for this moment
this newness of autumn where
the fog has set in

I see no horizon
no mermaid
or frog

but I hear them
crawling and quarreling
like "plenty of wild fowl" at play

I want to be there
upon the cold salt of Hill 60
where the gun pill box and air raid shelter
observe the scales of the Blackfish
the flash of the lighthouse beneath the
birth of night

I was not borne of this port
but have become its sea-captain
my breath tastes the weather and
its fish like effervescence upon
my tongue

my eyes follow the crooked coast
up past the breakwater
toward the battered lighthouse
and the bruised rocks which
surround it
            
they were mine once
bound to my throat
naked and full

holding all they could


Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (03-09-2004 03:13 PM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 03-08-2004 05:15 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

my eyes follow the crooked coast
up past the breakwater
toward the battered lighthouse
and the bruised rocks which
surround it
            
they were mine once
bound to my throat
naked and full

~*~

Keep 'em coming, little one...
aujussy wolf
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2 posted 03-08-2004 05:17 PM       View Profile for aujussy wolf   Email aujussy wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aujussy wolf

Yey you posted another in the famous series , again you take the reader on a journey to this far off land of wonder
thanks for the trip
Cpat Hair
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3 posted 03-08-2004 06:15 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

walking straight is a novelty
well at least for this moment

an effort to draw the reader into the crooked coast line itself and that one can not walk straight from here to there or a reference to the season itself and its effects on you personally..
or are you using the season as a metaphor for aging?

in any case... this as always struck me as wonderfully done.. the ending already quoted strong and with an intimate feel for both flesh and a place..and a time.. and an idea..

bravo ma'am... bravo..


mytuesdaywishes
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4 posted 03-08-2004 06:16 PM       View Profile for mytuesdaywishes   Email mytuesdaywishes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mytuesdaywishes

beautiful, just....beautiful
i'm a fan

joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless...

Grover
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5 posted 03-08-2004 06:46 PM       View Profile for Grover   Email Grover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Grover's Home Page   View IP for Grover

A terrific write! A great poem... thanks! Grover.
Enchantress
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Somewhere in time~


6 posted 03-08-2004 06:49 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Oh my....this is wonderful!!
Love it!
Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
   So you won't ever forget me ~

Martie
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7 posted 03-08-2004 08:40 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Maree

The imagery and feelings ....so well done!!  

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8 posted 03-08-2004 08:47 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

WOW! love this one, so full of imagery and pondering thoughts. One to read more than once.
wranx
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9 posted 03-08-2004 09:37 PM       View Profile for wranx   Email wranx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wranx

just awesome M.G.

I'm starting to know this lighthouse of yours
Jamie
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10 posted 03-09-2004 12:39 AM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

Beautimous Mmy-- feel like I am seeing it with you--

one tiny thing- why the word 'nor'? just a personal thing i guess

Hugs

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

iliana
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11 posted 03-09-2004 01:23 AM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Dark Angel -- I love these scenes of yours.  Especially liked:

I see no horizon
no mermaid
nor frog

"but I hear them
crawling and quarreling
like "plenty of wild fowl" at play

I want to be there
upon the cold salt of Hill 60
where the gun pill box and air raid shelter
observe the scales of the Blackfish
the flash of the lighthouse beneath the
birth of night"
Dark Angel
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12 posted 03-09-2004 03:29 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Karilea...I'll try Sunshine. Thank you so much.

aujussy wolf.. you are most welcome.. and Thank you.

Cpat...all of the above, it's all mixed in together. Thanks for the "bravo" and your comments.. much appreciated.

mytuesdaywishes...Thank you and I am YOUR fan

Grover... thank you so very much.

Enchantress, thank you for the wonderful and I'm so glad you love it.

Martie,  thank you so much.


Midnitesun.. thank you, glad you enjoyed.

Ed, thanks for the awesome...but would you explain the MG to me please?


Jamie, yanno? I think you are.  oh and the "nor" there was no reason why, except for that is how it came out but yep I sacked the letter "r" so  now we have "or" I think I like it better that way now....so thank s m'dear.

Iliana, thank you so very much.

Thank you all for stopping by, for your lovely replies and comments. They mean so much to me.  Thank you.

Maree

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

Tiersdin
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13 posted 05-01-2004 08:28 PM       View Profile for Tiersdin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tiersdin

Like I said, I'm running out of praises that are high enough for your talent.  Maree, honestly, you should publish. If and when you do, please let me know.

~Tier
 
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