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toward the battered lighthouse - scene5
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toward the battered lighthouse - scene5 |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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walking straight is a novelty well at least for this moment this newness of autumn where the fog has set in I see no horizon no mermaid or frog but I hear them crawling and quarreling like "plenty of wild fowl" at play I want to be there upon the cold salt of Hill 60 where the gun pill box and air raid shelter observe the scales of the Blackfish the flash of the lighthouse beneath the birth of night I was not borne of this port but have become its sea-captain my breath tastes the weather and its fish like effervescence upon my tongue my eyes follow the crooked coast up past the breakwater toward the battered lighthouse and the bruised rocks which surround it they were mine once bound to my throat naked and full holding all they could Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. (by Virginia Woolf) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (03-09-2004 03:13 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
my eyes follow the crooked coast up past the breakwater toward the battered lighthouse and the bruised rocks which surround it they were mine once bound to my throat naked and full ~*~ Keep 'em coming, little one... |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
Yey you posted another in the famous series , again you take the reader on a journey to this far off land of wonder thanks for the trip  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
walking straight is a novelty well at least for this moment an effort to draw the reader into the crooked coast line itself and that one can not walk straight from here to there or a reference to the season itself and its effects on you personally.. or are you using the season as a metaphor for aging? in any case... this as always struck me as wonderfully done.. the ending already quoted strong and with an intimate feel for both flesh and a place..and a time.. and an idea.. bravo ma'am... bravo.. |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
beautiful, just....beautiful i'm a fan joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless... |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
A terrific write! A great poem... thanks! Grover. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my....this is wonderful!! Love it! Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree The imagery and feelings ....so well done!!  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
WOW! love this one, so full of imagery and pondering thoughts. One to read more than once. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
just awesome M.G. I'm starting to know this lighthouse of yours |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Beautimous Mmy-- feel like I am seeing it with you-- one tiny thing- why the word 'nor'? just a personal thing i guess Hugs JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Dark Angel -- I love these scenes of yours. Especially liked: I see no horizon no mermaid nor frog "but I hear them crawling and quarreling like "plenty of wild fowl" at play I want to be there upon the cold salt of Hill 60 where the gun pill box and air raid shelter observe the scales of the Blackfish the flash of the lighthouse beneath the birth of night" |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Karilea...I'll try Sunshine. Thank you so much. aujussy wolf.. you are most welcome.. and Thank you. Cpat...all of the above, it's all mixed in together. Thanks for the "bravo" and your comments.. much appreciated.  mytuesdaywishes...Thank you and I am YOUR fan Grover... thank you so very much. Enchantress, thank you for the wonderful and I'm so glad you love it. Martie, thank you so much. Midnitesun.. thank you, glad you enjoyed. Ed, thanks for the awesome...but would you explain the MG to me please? Jamie, yanno? I think you are. oh and the "nor" there was no reason why, except for that is how it came out but yep I sacked the letter "r" so now we have "or" I think I like it better that way now....so thank s m'dear. Iliana, thank you so very much. Thank you all for stopping by, for your lovely replies and comments. They mean so much to me. Thank you. Maree Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Like I said, I'm running out of praises that are high enough for your talent. Maree, honestly, you should publish. If and when you do, please let me know. ~Tier |
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