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Can't think of a title for this one
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
We met as usual Somewhere between two destinations Yours moving south, north, south east Arriving We left In the city Holding up the traffic of humanity Desiring a heat We moved in pleasure And apart |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I can't think of one either. Interesting poem though! Juju |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
gulf? good write... regards, sudhir |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Or, as some poets do, use the first line... "We met" |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Oh I got it -Acongruent- yes its eally none but still! -Juju- |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Juju, Dingusjr, Sudhir Iyer First of all - thank you for your comments. The meanings crossed so many the words I wrote that, I have filed this under "we met". It is almost like something the English loved to do at train stations, although I hope we have been better educated by now. As dingusjr pointed out it is an easy line, but unfortunately we have this habit of meeting and it has all the expression of exploration, wet sunday afternoons and a game of chance. As some point I wrote "we met, her eyes went into my boot ripping my underwear as she took everything and my salvation", and I cant remember how to spell something something that echoe's from wall to wall, hence I wrote the wall started for 10 as I was writing this. We met is not completely trite, nor if someone feels it is right, should it be ignored. regards Dave |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
ahh i liked this poem , a tale of 2 |
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