navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #31 » A Walk
Open Poetry #31
Post A Reply Post New Topic A Walk Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2004-03-05 07:15 AM


A Walk

Sometimes I walk among the clouds
Where the mist locks me in shroud
Sweeping through my mind in tails
Like the dance of the seven veils

I ride the currents in a surge
Hear the echoes of a dirge
Sense the feelings of a spell
Let my mind into its dwell

And I am dressed in hews of gold
That moulds my senses in its hold
Sweeping me in wiles of seem
Very much just like a dream

And here the veils will peel away
Like the stages of a play
And visit me the rue of do
That feels to me just like a coup

And I am king of all I rein
All of pleasure, none of pain



© Copyright 2004 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Goldenrose
Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665

1 posted 2004-03-05 07:23 AM


Well written and the ryme was spot on...a fine poem Seymour..thanks..

Goldenrose.

''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity''

Kicking Kim
Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!
2 posted 2004-03-05 07:28 AM


I loved the rhythm especially in this one, but the end was beautifully written.  It was such a well rounded poem, I really enjoyed it.  

^*Kimberley*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

EternitysHorizon
Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145
Twilight's Orchestra
3 posted 2004-03-05 07:30 AM


Would it be thou walks such
ALWAYS

"High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy."

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2004-03-05 07:31 AM


Very very nicely done as usual my friend.....Smooth delibvery....

Eric

scorpio
Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178
right...there
5 posted 2004-03-05 08:44 AM


Wonderful morning write Sy!!  Much enjoyed!!

believe in what your heart feels...

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
6 posted 2004-03-05 09:11 AM


And here the veils will peel away
Like the stages of a play
And visit me the rue of do
That feels to me just like a coup

And I am king of all I rein
All of pleasure, none of pain

~*~

Dear friends do say...
it's all about fun...

Good morning, Sy!!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
7 posted 2004-03-05 09:28 AM


"Sometimes I walk among the clouds
Where the mist locks me in shroud
Sweeping through my mind in tails
Like the dance of the seven veils"

May you always have only pleasure and no pain dear Sy!
Humm, 'dance of the seven veils' eh?
Methinks I had better brew you a strong cup this morn.
~Morning hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
8 posted 2004-03-05 09:40 AM


Sweeping me in wiles of seem
Very much just like a dream


wow...a wonderful walk through your mind..*s

M

suthern
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Seraphic
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723
Louisiana
9 posted 2004-03-05 11:11 AM


I like this walk in optimism very much, my friend... well done! *S*
passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
10 posted 2004-03-05 11:37 AM


maybe I should go for a walk?
Startime55
Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada
11 posted 2004-03-05 12:15 PM


Such a beautiful way to start the day...I love the way this poem flowed so well...

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

12 posted 2004-03-05 01:51 PM


so very right...your the pilot....and flying rather high...in a glide...wonderful write.
Juju
Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams
13 posted 2004-03-05 04:44 PM


I liked it alot.
(smiles)

Juju

Grover
Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada
14 posted 2004-03-05 04:55 PM


I'm a fan of yours Seymour... very good as usual! Grover.
jaicie114
Senior Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 750
On the edge of forever
15 posted 2004-03-06 06:42 PM


Wow...absolutely loved this one, Sy!  Thanks!

Love and Light...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
16 posted 2004-03-07 01:20 PM


Hello, Dear Sonneteer Divine ~ and ye be one that is a golden master of his craft!

This "Walk" was heavenly!

Angel hugs & kisses,
EA

garysgirl
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237
Florida, USA
17 posted 2004-03-09 02:45 AM



Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #31 » A Walk

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary