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steavenr
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0 posted 2004-03-05 12:17 PM


the gilded glistening glint of ice-shard infested realms
doth pierce the soul with languid darts surreal
and steals from night the glow-stained edges
of star-filled clouds in imagination’s enchanted dreams

and lends to beams that burden brightly
the sun-drenched arrows
of daylight dynasties,
flowing brooks

of rays
that warm
the soul and
cheer the heart

alone



© Copyright 2004 Steaven R Snow - All Rights Reserved
aujussy wolf
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1 posted 2004-03-05 01:14 AM


really cool the way you arranged it on the page , adds to the impact ...great job on this writing
passing shadows
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2 posted 2004-03-05 03:46 AM


made me smile
Sunshine
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3 posted 2004-03-05 06:58 AM


and lends to beams that burden brightly
the sun-drenched arrows
of daylight dynasties,
flowing brooks

of rays
that warm
the soul and
cheer the heart

alone

~*~

Graphically detailed poetry is a challenge all in it's own.  
Now, please, create one that IS in the shape of an arrowhead...
I would enjoy seeing that!  Very nice!

ethome
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4 posted 2004-03-05 07:39 AM


Love the presentation along with the good writing.....

Eric

Kicking Kim
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5 posted 2004-03-05 09:05 AM


"the sun-drenched arrows,
of daylight dynasties"

What a wonderful poem.  Your choice of diction is incredible, everything seemed to flow perfectly.  You are a very talented poet.  Good write

^*~Kimberley~*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

steavenr
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6 posted 2004-03-05 11:56 AM


aujussy, Sunshine, and ethome:  I fear I may not take any credit for the graphic nature of the poem.  It just turned out that way.  I had no design in mind, and I always preview in left margin and center view...just to see how it looks...I liked the way it looked centered...but thank you...sometimes the words themselves are far more intelligent than the scribe who pens them...sometimes they seem to have a life and will of their own

passing...I am glad...one smile is worth and eternity of writing

Kicking Kim...you are far too kind and I am certainly flattered...I do love words, though...

PS Sunshine, I haven't forgotten your challenge on the design of the arrowhead...I will certainly try when I find the time

Startime55
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7 posted 2004-03-05 12:37 PM


Designed to warm the heart...Beautiful..

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