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Juju
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since 2003-12-29
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In your dreams

0 posted 2004-03-04 05:59 PM



Brocken seriness in the sky
gone the swans that never will fly
children reflecting will soon cry.

"Hopelessness," they whisper too, as they do.
"Why me?" They yell to the death mute they once knew.

-The only way to live is to give your all.-
They wanted to fly, jumping the water fall.
Only not to fly, but to stumble and fall.

Children blinded with sorrow drift alone.
They fear this world as they each turn to stone.
They sell thier souls... the only thing they own.

Next they start to die
and others stand by
theyre too in a lie
off of somebody's  
unnatural high.


all more
sorrow








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Grover
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since 2004-01-27
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London, ON, Canada
1 posted 2004-03-04 06:55 PM


Nice poem, except I couldn't understand the opening words, "Brocken seriness." Enjoyed! Grover.
Juju
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since 2003-12-29
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In your dreams
2 posted 2004-03-04 07:06 PM


Thats because it goes with the next line.

Smiles, glad you liked it.

-Juju

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