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ParisGrl
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since 2000-06-01
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0 posted 2004-03-04 03:05 PM



In my thoughts you always are
Even though sometimes we are far away
In my thoughts you have a place to always stay
I never thought of you as anything to me....it wasn't until that dream that I begin to see
I am going to be your wife one day, then from your arms I will never stray
You bring me so much happiness and peace in my hectic world
I am yours till the end of eternity
With you I always wish to be

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Juju
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since 2003-12-29
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In your dreams
1 posted 2004-03-04 06:07 PM


I like the idea, but it needs to be organized.  If you fix the flow, it will be easier to read. (:
It was really good thoughts and happy poems are like a jewel, all some need is polish equipment and wooola hahahahahahah! its a master peice!

lots of love
-Juju

Grover
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since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada
2 posted 2004-03-22 01:09 PM


Love is so beautifully expressed.
DavePage
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since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917

3 posted 2004-03-22 02:42 PM


Paris

You can only control and dominate so many for so long

You can dominate a small amount for possibly for ever

As you control
You destroy
And most governments dont understand

that whipping someone produces less than optimal performance

allow yourself in love to dance a wire

and make that electric

Dave

ParisGrl
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4 posted 2004-03-23 03:58 PM


Juju,

Thank you for your reply.  I can't think of how it would flow better though.  Any ideas?  Thanks for reading.

~Laura~

Grover,

Thank you for reading my "expression of love"  Take Care.

~Laura~

Dave,

It is definitely electric!  Thanks for reading.

~Laura~

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