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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2004-03-02 10:33 AM


I, in stare
Knew depths of sky flat to feel
as rolled stock blue, paper thin,
Allowed to simply fool eyes
Into thinking there was more beyond
The cold touch of winter’s bowl
Than mere truth of physics allowed,
In despair,
I have lit a torch
Holding it to edges of this hue
Wishing flames to catch
And warm in me something
Other than the burn

Of empty

Today I search
For the wrinkled folds
Where night and day crumble sky
To begin again the fumbled find
Of match

For I would burn this
The hateful winter’s sky


[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (03-02-2004 11:17 AM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-03-02 10:35 AM



She does hang on, a cruel mistress
and a tease...

it's almost here...

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2 posted 2004-03-02 10:37 AM


Cpat Hair
Enjoyed the read.

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3 posted 2004-03-02 10:37 AM


enjoyed your words this morning, Ron

M

LeeJ
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4 posted 2004-03-02 10:38 AM


Spring is in the air my friend...and I've even heard we're getting another snow storm next week, and yet, to no avail...spring in all her stubborness and glory will eventually arise.

Lovely write

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5 posted 2004-03-02 10:41 AM


Ron...You expressed that need for warmth so well...it's even been wet and gloomy in California.  As always, you write so well!!  Warm hugs!
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6 posted 2004-03-02 11:56 AM


thanks all... appreciate the comments..

it's more than winter here.. one could substitute summer for winter in this piece and it would still say what I wished to say... but yes.. Spring is around the corner..and the days now longer grow warmer.. I am always happy to see that.


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7 posted 2004-03-02 02:54 PM


Hello Ron,

You are still the master at capturing that essence of the inner ache. This is stunning. Missed reading you.


Corinne

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8 posted 2004-03-02 02:58 PM


"I have lit a torch
Holding it to edges of this hue
Wishing flames to catch
And warm in me something
Other than the burn

Of empty"

Such an ache to this write Captain..
well done sir.
Hugs~


~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~
            

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9 posted 2004-03-02 05:57 PM


Today I search
For the wrinkled folds
Where night and day crumble sky'''
~~

awww yes, the ever dreadful last hit of winter...Spring will be a welcomed warmth....


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There are moments when speech
is but a mouth pressed lightly and
humbly against the angel's hands.

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10 posted 2004-03-02 06:24 PM


I, in stare
Knew depths of sky flat to feel
as rolled stock blue, paper thin,

=================================


damn I love how you do that..........


have lit a torch
Holding it to edges of this hue
Wishing flames to catch
And warm in me something
Other than the burn

Of empty


====================

and how you do that............

sheesh... ya had me from the title on.......

very cool title and closing couplet poet sir....
very cool indeed.


Through the water ... through the rain ... to the soul of everything
Wash my heart out on the stones ... and I'm almost gone.

David Gray

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11 posted 2004-03-02 06:29 PM


enjoyed
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12 posted 2004-03-02 08:16 PM


WOW....
unique
incredible
fantastic

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13 posted 2004-03-02 08:27 PM


Well Ron if you run out of matches
I almost always keep a spare lighter
or three around
sounds like you are ready for
seasons end
whatever that minds

Cheers
Kendell

"High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy."

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14 posted 2004-03-02 08:29 PM


very well written - winter just has to end soon - Paul
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15 posted 2004-03-02 08:29 PM


Thankfully, yes, Spring should arrive on time this year. (besides, I've just put in the last of my wood)


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16 posted 2004-03-02 08:39 PM


a very intense write...passionate with anger
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17 posted 2004-03-03 06:21 PM


Tried to pick a favourite line Sir, but couldn't for I love them all.

Excellent as usual  

M



Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

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18 posted 2004-03-03 07:05 PM


A soulful write, Ron. I felt the chill of a failed love's memory, one that whose touch should have left you warm, but somehow failed. Or is this really just about winter? LOL
(and the lotus you imagined was the inspiration for that write, LOL)

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19 posted 2004-03-03 10:32 PM


"In despair,
I have lit a torch
Holding it to edges of this hue
Wishing flames to catch
And warm in me something
Other than the burn"

If the weasel had just sat quietly, while you wrote...he would still be with us today.  

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20 posted 2004-03-04 12:46 PM


I, in stare
Knew depths of sky flat to feel
as rolled stock blue, paper thin,
Allowed to simply fool eyes
Into thinking there was more beyond

Well heck, you just had to go and remind me!
This speaks volumes to this heart of mine~
Thank you Cpat~

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21 posted 2004-03-04 01:11 AM


Ron, I really enjoyed this and certainly do feel like mocking the sky myself, but right now the Mocking Birds are doing that for us.  They start up about 11 p.m. and go on all night long!
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