Open Poetry #31 |
Twilight Shadows |
ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
I watched it approach Its timing, faithful; From the west, slink down The slope, over trees And the bowl-rim Of the lake, jumping dead cattails; Where yellow-perch spawn And red-wings, sing songs, Of tree-til-dee, in April * The something that is, But not physical, (Nor mental) creeps Across the ice On soft, cat feet. Quiet in approach It spreads like water stain, Inching across the glare; Changing the atmosphere. * This thing, not there Yet phenomenal, changes Colors (all) to shades of gray, As it approaches; Then paints them black. Silently, it moves my way, Comes close with thought That I am unaware Of what its augury brings; But I can feel its cold breath On my back. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
note: This poem was arranged in my mind while icefishing last evening (made mental notes as the sun went down behind the mountain...) _______ice ><> |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Good notes. Good lines... get fish? |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Some terrific contrasts, images here! Grover. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Sunshine, Thanks for reading and commenting...and yes, I did catch some fish, a few of those big yellow perch that spawn in the cattails in April... |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Grover Thanks for your reply, The images are what I saw, I give nature all the credit... _______ice ><> |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
The something that is, But not physical, (Nor mental) creeps Across the ice On soft, cat feet. Quiet in approach It spreads like water stain, Inching across the glare; Changing the atmosphere. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I am loving your inspire ice, and am so glad you took the time to make mental notes. Pretty nice and picturesque. Thanks for sharing this snapshot! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
premonitions and inklings words unspoken thoughts not thought silences not heard just there |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Good-Morning Ford, I love this. :-) |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Yes, Ice -- you have it! Enjoyed! ....jo |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
a very well written "painting" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
kinda creepy, but beautiful too |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
how beautifully written and felt...extraordinary covenant with nature. Outstanding write. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ice~ Oh my ... I think I've been there~ Beautifully rendered~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big angel hugs) Yay! As so suits your wonderful name and calm, loving spirit, sweet friend, I've never went icefishing but I've went fishing with my grandpa and so I know it must be so comforting! (smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ford, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton P.S: Here's something I know you'll like, my revolutionary friend! /pip/Forum88/HTML/001826.html "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Bluesy That is my favorite stanza in the poem, one of the few that I did not have to rewrite over and over, thanks for your reply... * Inky Exactly, what you said was perfect, a poem in its self... Thanks for reading... * froggy Thank you, glad you love it... * iliana Thank you, I hope the "it" I have is a good it....lol * muted "painting" is a nice word.....thanks for reading * Dixie/shadows Part of the thrill of being outdoors is that it is "creepy" I guess that's why I never tire of being there...Thanks for reading and the reply * LeeJ "covenant" another beautiful and fitting word...thank you for the nice comments. * Marge T If you have been there you know the feeling, and the tranquility that it renders...thank you for the reply * Noah * Thanks for reading and the reply, I will look at the website.. |
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