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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2004-02-26 07:36 PM




Your silence no longer fills me with sorrow
but I won't ever forget
for you will always have a permanent place
high on a shelf so as not to break me
remembering the way I used to feel
and how much I loved.

When running my hands over your curves and planes
refusing to feel the imperfections
considered abstract I suppose
turning over fine lines
and the etchings you drew in my eyes
accepting the fact
that we were not so unique after all.

Yet my thoughts of you seem more fragile today
when in reality they are safer there
placed away from the edge of my fears
pushed back where my tears used to fall
in place of my heart, beside yours.


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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2004-02-26 07:41 PM


When running my hands over your curves and planes
refusing to feel the imperfections

Very nice, Lori

good to read you

M

Martie
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2 posted 2004-02-26 07:43 PM


Lori

I think love is always kept someplace.  A place where it can no longer hurt you...if there is such a place, is good.  Enjoyed the use of metaphor here..and the thoughts you brought me.  Thanks..and a hug

Enchantress
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3 posted 2004-02-26 07:49 PM


"When running my hands over your curves and planes
refusing to feel the imperfections
considered abstract I suppose
turning over fine lines
and the etchings you drew in my eyes"

Beutiful Lori...such a sad ache.
Hugs, Nancy


~ Can I keep you? ~
            -Casper  
            

Sadelite
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4 posted 2004-02-26 07:59 PM


Beautifully written with images that I understood well.  Thank you for posting...
                Sadie

jwesley
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5 posted 2004-02-26 08:02 PM


Ah, my friend ... the last three lines in particular were wonderfully spoken and said so much.  Great write Blues...

jwesley

ice
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6 posted 2004-02-26 09:43 PM


Bluesey
Nice poem, enjoyed reading it..I like the way you use puctuation in a minimal way, it adds to the feeling of the poems words, leaves the reader a little brethless at the end of each stanza.
__________ice
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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
7 posted 2004-02-26 09:57 PM


I'm just reeling in the years,
and I am certainly in a better place.

Thanks to each of you for reading,
I appreciate it very much~

inkedgoddess
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8 posted 2004-02-26 10:16 PM


Yet my thoughts of you seem more fragile today
when in reality they are safer there
placed away from the edge of my fears
pushed back where my tears used to fall
in place of my heart, beside yours.



i know, i know, but i hate when i have to bury it, but it just has to be sometimes that way, so to avoid those endless tears,
love this my dear blonde poetrygirl

Local Rebel
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9 posted 2004-02-26 10:49 PM


Very good to read you again bluesy...

it's always easier to compartmentalize eh?  it gets noisy in our brains though eventually -- which is why loud music is good..

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
10 posted 2004-02-27 12:30 PM


Michele and Reb...thank you for being here, and lifting my smile tonight.    
Kahlil
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11 posted 2004-02-27 01:00 AM


B:  I feel like we've just had a heart to heart chat about this very subject and you put my feelings into words.  This reality is difficult and sad, and I know no other way than to keep it on the shelf.  It is love, after all. ~K~
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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving
12 posted 2004-02-27 04:16 AM


oh, youre sad too?  

must be something going around!

this is beautiful, you sing so softly of something that can hurt very deeply

Richy
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13 posted 2004-02-27 04:37 AM




Bluesy, I just can't find the words
right now


And even if I could, I'm not sure they'd
make much sense anyway
Thank You Bluesy

I don't think this one
will be leavig me
anytime soon

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14 posted 2004-02-27 08:59 AM


The dream love....and the real -- you balance them so well, keep yourself at the perfect center with such finesse. I wish I had the knack, and I wish I'd written this poem.

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Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 2004-02-27 09:04 AM


BluesSerenade
A lovely read, enjoyed.

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16 posted 2004-02-27 04:25 PM


Your poems never fail to touch... This melancholy beauty is superb!
ThisDiamond
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17 posted 2004-02-27 07:21 PM


Hugs kiddo:
Well done.
TD

Grover
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18 posted 2004-02-27 07:38 PM


Very good! Grover.
passing shadows
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displaced
19 posted 2004-02-28 05:46 AM


I could quote the entire poem...at every line I was nodding my head in relation
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