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Where Twilight Ends
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Where Twilight Ends |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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I found a place where silence bloomed from beds of ashes strewn with forgotten moments. A garden where whispers blew a zephyr dance across ghosted images, a mirage of petals from long since trampled flowers. Solitude bleeds black into blue exactly where twilight ends and blends into night. How bruised the sunrise looks through dejavu, and jaded eyes. How distant the dawn seems when walking on shattered hopes; a journey of thought, broken. And if it weren't for the pain I would have found morning where light pierces the view, but instead im left standing... still, bleeding black into blue. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
I hope that the twilight brings, a new dawning on your horizon. One that holds you gently, and ushers in, tranquility, and contentedness Really enjoyed this Dawn Hugs, Richy |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
I liked this poem a lot...good style and pace to it..well done..and thank you for the words..... Goldenrose. ''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity'' |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Solitude bleeds black into blue exactly where twilight ends and blends into night." Loved those lines. "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...I found a place where silence bloomed from beds of ashes strewn with forgotten moments. ...And if it weren't for the pain I would have found morning where light pierces the view, but instead im left standing... still, bleeding black into blue. ~*~ Where Twilight Ends...Poetry Begins. Enjoyed this very, very much... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Exquisite!!!  Love & Light, EA |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Solitude bleeds black into blue exactly where twilight ends and blends into night. How bruised the sunrise looks through dejavu, and jaded eyes. How distant the dawn seems when walking on shattered hopes; a journey of thought, broken. Even if this didn't feel like you'd been reading my mind, I'd applaud this outstanding write. Excellent work! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
 this is truly outstanding writing Dawn. So deep, the meaning.  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dawn~ Such a lovely peel of reveal ... you splash the ink so originally~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
kinda sad  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
exactly where twilight ends and blends into night. How bruised the sunrise looks through dejavu, and jaded eyes. How distant the dawn seems something comes around the corner, sneeking up like the last breath of the sunset as it vanishes into itself, rising again come the morning....well something like this  |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Okay now I am depressed... hope your happy. Powerful emotions here... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
How bruised the sunrise looks through dejavu, and jaded eyes. You have painted a picture in still life, and captured it so well. Hugs to you, dear Dawn~ |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
A sad poem, but with the mysterious manifestation of your pen... I would say it's uttered well. Deb |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
great emotion-filled write...especially liked the lines: "And if it weren't for the pain I would have found morning" powerful transition lines |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is exquistie...very nicely done! Hugs~
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh, this is lovely. I've never seen sadness more wistful. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Oh wow... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Muted - this was a superior piece! |
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