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Ericc
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0 posted 2004-02-24 11:46 AM



There are layers to this
uncertainty.

And truth belongs to
empty moments.

We begin here.

Certain only of the ache of
our caress.

The layers fall.

© Copyright 2004 Eric P McCarty - All Rights Reserved
Grover
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1 posted 2004-02-24 11:50 AM


Very good-- use of word economy, well-written! Grover.
steavenr
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2 posted 2004-02-24 12:02 PM


this one is a genuine keeper...hate to pull only one line out of a real gem, but this line blew me away:

"And truth belongs to
empty moments"

my only disappointment was that I didn't have the privilege of writing it myself

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
3 posted 2004-02-24 12:02 PM


Your beautiful poem unfolds like an opening  lotus blossom...

Love & Light,
EA

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2004-02-24 12:03 PM


IWIHWT Eric!!
Fantastic write..much enjoyed.
Hugs~

  ~ Whatever our souls are made of,
      his and mine are the same. ~      
            

cinnamongirl
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5 posted 2004-02-24 07:38 PM


Beautiful... the layers fall as soft as petals of roses, revealing the truest beauty.

Wonderful, magical poem.  

Thank you for sharing this...

I love you,

Moca

EternitysHorizon
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6 posted 2004-02-24 08:42 PM


truth is so often found in those empty moments

enjoyed, sparse, minamilsts are applauding

Where rainbow touches earth
place your foot upon the light illuminating forever- EternitysHorizon
Often see, rarely touched
Rise if ye seek to see

Martie
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7 posted 2004-02-24 11:41 PM


Ericc...You always seem to touch some aching honest part of love that I never saw or could pin point until you wrote it.  Thank you for that.
passing shadows
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8 posted 2004-02-25 04:50 AM


I admire you
Margherita
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Eternity
9 posted 2004-02-25 01:29 PM


You know the way, the gestures, the words to make those layers fall... you have the magical formula.

And you reveal just enough to make us want "to begin here" ...

So beautiful!
I love you.
Margherita

ThisDiamond
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10 posted 2004-02-25 05:19 PM


Beautiful Eric.
TD

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
11 posted 2004-02-25 05:44 PM


We begin here.

Certain only of the ache of
our caress.
love the thought

*s
M

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just out of reach
12 posted 2004-02-25 08:55 PM


Very sharp write. Enjoyed. Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."


— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet



    

A Romantic Heart
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13 posted 2004-02-26 12:11 PM


Keep peeling back those layers...see the beauty underneath!

~ARH
love and hugs

Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH

Suetang
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14 posted 2004-02-26 10:37 PM


Hey Eric

I really loved this beautiful piece of writing.

Take care.....Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Juju
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In your dreams
15 posted 2004-02-26 10:40 PM


Your poem was very creative and read very smoothly(:"

Juju

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