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"2 Flutes and Broken Glass"

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Brad_Smith
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0 posted 02-24-2004 05:50 AM       View Profile for Brad_Smith   Email Brad_Smith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad_Smith

One gift

2 dreams

Seperated

Better for Bride
than broken
said she

On Mother's Mantle
My Millenium's Faith
belongs in my home

once again

to shine
awaiting a toast

Irish Crystal
Etched Sunshine
Sparkles
Somewhere

Seperated by fears
and tears
to fill two flutes
with joy

With her father's permission
The match made

They would say,
cheers
"To Life!"
"To Life!"
L'CHAIM!!
(pronounced L-khyme)

One Broken
One kept to shine!

Mazal Tav!

© Copyright 2004 Kenneth Bradley Smith - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
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1 posted 02-24-2004 08:53 AM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

and a great custom/tradition and perhaps superstition?  Yes?  Wonderful write
Copperbell
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interesting, I don't know this custom
steavenr
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3 posted 02-24-2004 11:15 AM       View Profile for steavenr   Email steavenr   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit steavenr's Home Page   View IP for steavenr

loved the line:

"Irish Crystal
Etched Sunshine"

nice description
Ericc
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4 posted 02-24-2004 11:27 AM       View Profile for Ericc   Email Ericc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ericc

Very creative.

Great write!

Eric
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5 posted 02-24-2004 12:47 PM       View Profile for VAS   Email VAS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for VAS

Yes, a lovely poem, so much tradition woven into this one.

the segment with "than" is a bit confusing to me, for than means a comparison...I'm wondering if you mean "then" I guess it could be a comparison that the crystal is better to be given for a bride than to be broken, I just want to be sure because it could be better for a bride, then broken as in the traditional ending to the ceremony when something is broken on the floor by the feet of the "groom" I think...my memory of the scenes in movies is blurry

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

passing shadows
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that's neat...I like this write

thanks for sharing
sea_of_okc
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I actually have attended one Jewish wedding and One Barmitzvah (sp?) I like the way you relate the traditions here. Great imagery.
Jamie
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Enjoyed reading this very much.

Check your mail

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Snow
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9 posted 01-01-2005 05:23 PM       View Profile for Snow   Email Snow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Snow's Home Page   View IP for Snow

ok ... so i had to go looking for your work....i'm intrigued.
i like what you wrote here, but i don't think i'm seeing it as the others are.

to me, the voice of the piece is crushed and aching..

but perhaps that's just my frame of mind today. either way i like it.

snow

"so I wait for you like a lonely house
till you will see me again and live in me.
Till then my windows ache"
p.neruda

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